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VIDEO WRECK



His beat rages for hours darting to the computer table without time to greet Mom or Dad as the light pops every minute; wired in space, lost in blank words when he speaks, enthralled to level up and gain power points because he cares more for video than human talk. The light on the screen aims at Tekken and aliens raging a war against supremacy, somewhere outside the real world he can’t deal with, now. And he puts the light on, enticing him to dim a special nook in a lit, closed room. Kiddie books unread for weeks; a migraine splits past 12 am for a kid of nine years unable to control an impulse. He eats, plays and deals with his robot pals.. . . . . . . . . . . other boys take their bikes out, buts he pushes another button controlled by his mechanical allies with guns ,roars. . . . . . Video wreck, Game! Gwendolyn’s Video Extravaganza by nette onclaud

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  1. Date: 10/16/2012 3:45:00 PM

    Nette, congratulations in RIX's "VIDEO GAME EXTRAVAGANZA" gaming contest.. :-) always~pd

  1. Date: 10/13/2012 4:21:00 PM

    Wonderful shape poem and nice presentation,Nette.....Congratulations on your well deserved win in this contest....Kudos to you,great pal...

  1. Date: 10/12/2012 9:50:00 PM

    CONGRATS NETTE LUV ON THIS COOL AND CLEVER SHAPE..WRITE .. AND WIN .. WOW..

  1. Date: 10/12/2012 12:51:00 PM

    Nette, big congrats on your win, love the poem and the layout...David

  1. Date: 10/12/2012 12:47:00 PM

    Congrats on your win!

  1. Date: 10/12/2012 10:24:00 AM

    What a sad child u painted in your entry, Nette...unfortunately it is probably not too uncommon a scene...with balance, video games can be a blessing, unfortunately many gamer children get "sucked" into the TV tube escaping the stresses of life...Great compare and contrast at the end...appreciated the somber tone too..CONGRATS, gwendolen

    R. Avatar Gwendolen R. Date: 10/12/2012 10:24:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    A great FIRST PLACE WIN!!!
  1. Date: 10/12/2012 5:46:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Gwen's "Video Game" contest Nette. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/3/2012 7:08:00 AM

    Superbly penned and so true of many kids this generation. Great shape poem, very creative Nette. They're hooked to their Gameboys, playstations and Nintendos...extremely addictive stuff.

  1. Date: 10/1/2012 10:20:00 PM

    Yeah..I know him!Beautiful poem.

  1. Date: 10/1/2012 3:58:00 PM

    way to do the contest, Nette. So original this is!!! wow, is that a game name video wreck?? I am sure this will score high.

  1. Date: 9/30/2012 3:15:00 PM

    wonderful poem and i love the way you've written it! best of luck in the contest...

  1. Date: 9/30/2012 1:34:00 PM

    This speaks much truth..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..Reads like winner to me..Good luck in the contest...Thanks for stopping by...Sara

  1. Date: 9/30/2012 7:26:00 AM

    Great shape poem nette! Going to save this one... love and hugs, Jack

  1. Date: 9/29/2012 11:53:00 PM

    I diiiggg...very creative! Wonder what this boy would do if someone yanked on the power cord. Yikes!!!

  1. Date: 9/29/2012 5:10:00 PM

    Wow, Nette, this is a spectacular shape poem my friend! You have mastered the video game geek here! You painted him very nicely, and all his negative aspects of his life! What an expressively wondrous piece, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 9/29/2012 4:05:00 PM

    This is a winner....you can save some quarters! Presentation, and wording, will get you a free credit! Lol