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The Snooping Walls

The snooping walls are watching me
And now they know my secret kink.
I feel their eyes upon my back
And wonder what the hell they think.

I fear they’ll tell the world about
The prostitute I sawed in half.
I trust the doors and windows, though,
As when I killed, I heard them laugh…

For Susan’s If these walls could talk contest

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  1. Date: 9/21/2012 7:46:00 PM

    Wow, Jack! An excellent and quite disturbing write. Don't worry your secrets safe...LOL! Congrats!! Hugs, Rhonda

  1. Date: 9/21/2012 4:20:00 AM

    This was so good, but so bad! Loved it Jack. Congratulations on your win!

  1. Date: 9/20/2012 12:00:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win Jack. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 9/19/2012 1:18:00 AM

    Congrats on a great win in Susan's contest with your wonderful entry!

  1. Date: 9/18/2012 3:20:00 PM

    Congrats on your winning work..Sara

  1. Date: 9/18/2012 2:41:00 PM

    Congrats on your write, well done. Sounds a bit like a broadway show, Todd Sweeney I think its called. Lee

  1. Date: 9/18/2012 12:03:00 PM

    Congrats Jack on this great and sinister write! Hugs

  1. Date: 9/18/2012 9:57:00 AM

    Congratulations on your imaginative poem winning. teriific job.

  1. Date: 9/18/2012 9:12:00 AM

    "Wow Jack. I had no idea! Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 9/18/2012 7:54:00 AM

    BIG CONGRATS JACK LUV ON A FABULOUS WRITE AND FIRST PLACE WIN .. ALWAYS A TREAT MY FRIEND ..

  1. Date: 9/18/2012 5:43:00 AM

    super nice write Jack..i like it..congrats on your win!! (^_^)

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 9:05:00 PM

    I just knew she would love this. Susan has a great dark humor herself. Big congrats. It was deliciously morbid.

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 7:40:00 PM

    wow!! great write my friend! Congratulations on your big win!! hugs:) Leonora

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 6:05:00 PM

    Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 5:30:00 PM

    I hope they talk on you Jack...lol. a funny one, but don't we wish walls could talk, so they perps could be caught more often and faster? great write and big congrats on a super win. One love. Joy Wells

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 3:20:00 PM

    You wrote this as tho u were a serial killer, eh?...Great concept and u blew the roof off the top with it!! Just leave it to Jack to write something grand!! Congrats, gwendolen

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 12:06:00 PM

    eerie yet beautifully crafted, jack.... sweet congrats and huggs!.:)

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 11:25:00 AM

    A great poem here jack!Congrats on your win.

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 10:27:00 AM

    Congratulation on your #1 win Jack! Loved the dark humor in this one :)

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 10:24:00 AM

    Hola, Jack , congratulations with your wonderful win in Susan's "If These Walls Could Talk..." contest.. have a nice day~ PD

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 10:16:00 AM

    congratulations on you win Jack a smashing write xx

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 9:37:00 AM

    congrats on a supe win Jack luv .. most creative entry .. hope all is okay ..

  1. Date: 9/16/2012 3:15:00 AM

    scarily crazy! love this thing

  1. Date: 9/8/2012 7:27:00 AM

    wow, i was not prepared for the second verse! very cleverly done and beautifully rhymed.

  1. Date: 9/8/2012 6:51:00 AM

    what a terrific idea to make this a murder mystery within the walls Jack luv .. a brilliant and outstanding entry .. winning wishes luv ..

  1. Date: 9/8/2012 1:39:00 AM

    You always come up with something scary .........makes one wonder!!!! no just kidding love it .xx

  1. Date: 9/8/2012 1:33:00 AM

    oh my , this is WONDERFUL wicked fun. thanks for giving me an idea. I think I may try this in limerick form!! I know Susan will love this.

  1. Date: 9/7/2012 9:14:00 PM

    Wow..glad you are not a saw killer...best wishes for the contest Jack! One love. Joy Wells

  1. Date: 9/7/2012 5:34:00 PM

    uh creepy man! The song is "life is a highway" I'm gonna ride it all night long. If your going my way I'm gonna ride it all night long.... by Chris Ledeux check it out on you tube.

  1. Date: 9/7/2012 5:15:00 PM

    Ha! lol! This is quite the humorous but also serious write! There are those that believe that the walls and windows and doors all talk to them, I mean REALLY talk to them...crazy people out there! Whata fabulous piece my friend, Great Work!!

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