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a stream of consciousness

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a stream of consciousness

in the city of Dublin
the seagulls cry out their desire
to fly back to the open sea
hearing them I think of my space
reduced to the one-way sky

a stranger tells me
*priveste imaginea de ansamblu
I wonder how could I
every second shrinks my shadow
ironically I sip my English tea
when you awkward stubborn sun
make my field hurry towards a late green

I can’t swim against the stream
but unaware of a deadline yet
I linger on the streets of my poems

* priveste imaginea de ansamblu
                                     *to look at the large picture

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  1. Date: 9/9/2012 10:04:00 PM

    This has a feel of stream of conciousness writing. I like the concreteness of the seagulls and of places. It reads quite nicely and lets you imagine.

    Balan Avatar Mirela Balan Date: 9/17/2012 10:45:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you and glad you let the poem stir your imagination!
  1. Date: 9/1/2012 11:51:00 AM

    MIRELA, , Congratulations, with your awesome entry in DEBBIE'S Bi-Lingual Poetry CONTEST.. All these entries were fun to read.. thank you for the entertainment, ta ta ~PD

    Balan Avatar Mirela Balan Date: 9/17/2012 10:41:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you. I really hope I'll find spare time to read poems published on this site!
  1. Date: 8/30/2012 7:10:00 PM

    No better place for stream of consciousness ;) what language is this? I don't think it's Gailic? This is another verse which would have ranked higher if it was longer with maybe 1 or 2 more phrases? An excellent write! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

    Balan Avatar Mirela Balan Date: 8/30/2012 10:16:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hello Debbie and glad you appreciated my poem. Also congratulations for the contest you held. Most of my poems are written in Romanian and I am trying to translate them Which is not an easy job. I have the feeling that you lose a great deal of the poem's charm when you translate it. And especially with languages of different origin. But it is also fascinating to some extent!
  1. Date: 8/30/2012 10:53:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Debbie Guzzi's "Bi-Lingual Poetry" contest Mirela. Love, Carol

    Balan Avatar Mirela Balan Date: 8/30/2012 10:07:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Carol!
  1. Date: 8/30/2012 7:17:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win Mirela xx

    Balan Avatar Mirela Balan Date: 8/30/2012 10:43:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Mandy. I can see there are very interesting contests on this site. And interesting to me it is the fact that memebers can organize competititons :)
  1. Date: 8/29/2012 10:27:00 PM

    A picturesque setting for your poem. Congratulations on your win.

    Balan Avatar Mirela Balan Date: 8/30/2012 10:41:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Joan. I am quite new around and i guess it will take me a few days to dicover this site.
  1. Date: 8/29/2012 10:07:00 AM

    Thank you Carol for your warm welcoming!

  1. Date: 8/29/2012 5:11:00 AM

    A warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer to you today Mirela. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. Hoping you find even more inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. May the sun shine on you that you might find great joy in your life. Thank you for sharing your writing with us. Love, Carol