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VOW OF POND'S WATER

                                                  Vow of pond’s water
                                           Still air hardly breaks promise
                                                   leaf causes ripple

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  1. Date: 8/24/2012 8:37:00 PM

    Debs is over thinking it down here!!

    devnath Avatar bl devnath Date: 8/25/2012 7:46:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    My friend, what i do feel, i write. If you show my mistake i will learn from you as a student. Because, learning has no end. As perfection has no level, so i think, i must keep my learning continuous. I always try to read your poems.Thanks, loved always, bl
  1. Date: 8/24/2012 8:36:00 PM

    this is REALLY good one, BL. One of your best haiku!

    devnath Avatar bl devnath Date: 8/25/2012 7:39:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    My friend, thanks a lot for enjoying my write. Loved always, bl
  1. Date: 8/24/2012 5:09:00 PM

    Enjoyed reading this one..I can see the scene...Thanks for stopping by..Sara

    devnath Avatar bl devnath Date: 8/24/2012 7:26:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks a lot for your comment. Sorry friend, the comment submitted below is for our lovely friend, Debbie Guzzi.
    devnath Avatar bl devnath Date: 8/24/2012 7:23:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    "Thanks for showing me the right way of haiku. I will try to change the way here of this haiku. Loved always,bl"
  1. Date: 8/24/2012 12:28:00 PM

    You have personified the pond & the air, haiku does not use personification for that is imposing the poets 'judgement' on the scene, give a factual sensory image and let the reader take it where the reader needs, the completion of the verse is in the readers mind's eye. Light & Love