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Commandment Battlement - Final Part -

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Commandment Battlement - Final Part -

A pawn for a pawn,a crown to crown,
whom is Master of this Lodge in town,
this I enquire while preparing the pyre for you to retire,
my meddlesome mobility unabated,indicative of a congenital nobility,
configured to coral this clambering caravan of corrupted cargo,
like a sqaulid sailing ship mired by a dragging anchor
I will be the insensitive squall that sreams and squashes
your spirit's resolve for immortality to which you aspire,
by necessity,your pirate army pines to encroach this backline of mine,
alert for advantage like hyenas on high ground,
but when the men turn round with countenances of lost children,
then the lead you must take and oasis forgo,

A final engagement cautiously commenced upon the carnage 
of this conflict's first casualties,terrific testament of mortality,
gross scenes torn pale and asunder by torchlights,
unremitting images of the half dead bleeding,
their moans bare and last moments barren
like old channels of lost rivers,
raging exhaustion spurned and supplanted with a spontaneous summons
of a brazen belief that my foe is more weakened,warbled and wasted than we,
here in middle,setting the endgame circuitously,
a defense is devised to deter like a pinching pillory,
my startegy is instinct,my ferocity divers -

J.A.B.  - Final Part -

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  1. Date: 7/26/2013 6:35:00 PM
    Is it possible to turn away to such truth, Justin? Lead the children on. This is immensely deep. A 'terrific testament of mortality'... I'm glad to be human. I'm glad to be alive to sacrifice. There you go again, making me think! Always, Laura

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner
    Date: 7/27/2013 2:14:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Truth teaches us whether we respect it or not - sacrafice leads to sanctity my beautiful friend - you make me accomplished, I thank you Laura - J.A.B. %
  1. Date: 8/21/2012 9:27:00 PM
    I've gottah agree with all of the comments below. I am honored to have stumbled upon your amazing work. If my brain implodes, it's because you are a million% awesome! :D Always, Laura

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner
    Date: 8/23/2012 4:55:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Your response is a treasure for me, I admire you too! Sometimes stumbling helps us to see just where we are my beautiful friend - so grateful you haven't turned away! J.A.B.
  1. Date: 8/4/2012 9:48:00 AM
    This "Commandment Battlement", a powerful force against the "caravan of corrupted cargo", Justin? You be a harbinger of force and solidarity to whomever has this need. Thank you, Justin! Best wishes, Mikki

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner
    Date: 8/5/2012 11:36:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I thank you for your faith in me Mikki - I respect you very much - J.A.B.
  1. Date: 7/28/2012 7:02:00 PM
    I am struck by the richness of your language, its metaphors and images..to write like this is an impossibility for a great many. Which requires an unending supply of mental resources of the highest order. Very astonishing..thnx for visiting..God bless:) Jag

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner
    Date: 7/30/2012 5:23:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I am truly grateful for this unselfish praise you grant me Jag - I find enlightenment in your work as well - J.A.B.
  1. Date: 7/28/2012 3:10:00 PM
    Like old channels of lost rivers, great line penned Justin v

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner
    Date: 7/30/2012 5:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Vie! Your work helps me to see more clearly - J.A.B.
  1. Date: 7/28/2012 1:06:00 PM
    Well...I stand in amazement of such genius Justin...I'm not sure I understood every word and phrase, but I know you have a great talent...Could you explain this phrase to me..."a defense id" Thanks...and many blessings Anne

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner
    Date: 7/30/2012 5:33:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Id refers to the instinct of the unconscious mind - I stand humbled by your sweet lauding Anne! My talent is ours,thank you! J.A.B.
  1. Date: 7/27/2012 11:03:00 AM
    great immagery and use of metophors & aliiteration. [their moans bare and last moments barren/like old channels of lost rivers] Light & Love

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner
    Date: 7/30/2012 5:36:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you for the Love Debbie - Your work is masterful - J.A.B.