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A Loving Son

They always said, “Please bother us no more” when Tommy sang, and Mom would stick her head inside his room. “We need to shut your door!” And once he loudly sobbed because he tore his toy plane, but all his father said was, “I cannot be bothered any more.” Another time he fell and felt so sore, but Mother quickly wiped the spot that bled, said, “Go to sleep. I’m going to shut the door.” He learned to neither ask them questions nor expect attention, for he felt great dread of hearing their “Please bother us no more.” One day a young man thought, “What’s living for? No more tears do I have left to shed. . . I’d better not forget to shut the door.” They heard the shot and ran and saw the gore. Their loving son lay silenced on his bed. The note read, “I will bother you no more. Mom and Dad, I remembered to shut the door.” by Andrea Dietrich non-winner in a recent contest now for PD's "any poem you posted this week.... "

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  1. Date: 9/27/2012 6:22:00 PM

    soup mail

  1. Date: 8/17/2012 10:13:00 PM

    Congrats on your WIN with this very touching and heartfelt poem! It deserved the victory!!

  1. Date: 8/10/2012 5:42:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "Any Poem Week" contest Andrea. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 8/7/2012 6:02:00 PM

    So awful and tragic! All parents of a child who commits suicide must feel terrible guilt. My heart breaks for them even if they made mistakes. Heartbreaking and well-written, Andrea. Congrats on your win! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

  1. Date: 8/6/2012 8:36:00 AM

    So touching

  1. Date: 8/5/2012 12:21:00 PM

    Congrats Andrea on your win in PD's contest with this touching write!

  1. Date: 8/5/2012 11:39:00 AM

    Andrea congrats on your win, love it...David

  1. Date: 8/5/2012 11:28:00 AM

    Wow, this brought tears to my eyes. I have a friend who lost her son this way, so terrible. Hope the parents don't carry that guilt, suicide is more than parents saying 'don't bother us". Well done, made me think. Thank you Lee

  1. Date: 8/5/2012 7:55:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win Andy, well done xx

  1. Date: 8/5/2012 7:06:00 AM

    congrats on your win Andrea

  1. Date: 8/4/2012 8:04:00 PM

    hello the wonderful of ANDREA ;-) congratulations with your awesome poem of the week. Thanks for the contest support. LUV~ PD

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 10:36:00 AM

    I am such an emotional wreck (in general, in my life right now) I probably shouldn't be reading poems on here. . . but i DID. This poem is Unbelievably sad and beautiful. Im at my friends house and i can't stop the tears from flowing. This really got to me.

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 3:34:00 AM

    Oh! Too sad Andrea and yes it is an eye opener for all exhausted parents on the brink of patience's end. Children need love and attention. Great poem Andrea!

  1. Date: 7/28/2012 6:25:00 PM

    Wow, a powerful message in this poem. All of us parents need to listen to our youngsters when they need us or it might be too late. Thank you for this wake-up call. Excellent poem.

  1. Date: 7/28/2012 3:13:00 PM

    wow, sad and powerful write here, my friend - a surefire winner

  1. Date: 7/27/2012 5:53:00 PM

    very sad, the parents got what they wanted but it shouldn't of got to that point, children need attention to talk verbally communicate very much sad write, and good luck on the contest...p.d.

  1. Date: 7/27/2012 3:42:00 PM

    Andrea whoa there, is this fiction? it started off with a slightly humurous tone, then slips quietly into a very sad tale, if it is a tale, either way you told it very well...David....is it fiction????

  1. Date: 7/27/2012 12:14:00 AM

    Whoah! This is horrifying the mental torture these parents subjected their son to...You wrote with the finest style...love your narration and the terribly sad lesson for the parents in the end! What a story..gwendolen

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 11:27:00 PM

    hi , Andrea...i'll be back tomorrow to comment your poem...xox~pd

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 6:02:00 PM

    though I must say I tend to go the sad route more often than not

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 5:59:00 PM

    you pen a sad one here Andrea...best wishes in the contest....hugs...Joseph

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 5:03:00 PM

    Chilling. Despite the content you have produced a fine piece of poetry with flow, enjambment and rhyming. A compelling treatment of a horrible theme.

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 1:47:00 PM

    Such a sad story you have penned here Andrea.It sure brings tear in the eyes.Enjoyed the read.

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 1:16:00 PM

    What a sad tale you tell in this ode! Moving - since unfortunely it does happen.Hope you are well! Please let me know what you think ofmy Cosmolgy poem. I got a lot of comments on "Isolation" - but none on my new one so far Peace

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 1:15:00 PM

    Nice story about a loving son. Good luck. Thanks, bl

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 1:10:00 PM

    I'm starting to understand why you got tired of my sad poems. I've read a handful of them today. I'm about done in. I pray to God we all get to heaven. The devil be damned.

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 12:57:00 PM

    Oh!...You got me in the heart with this one! The stories I could tell you with this one... I'd make it a Fav...But I don't think I could ever read it again? :*(

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 12:15:00 PM

    amazing! this is a very powerful story and the format you've used is wonderful. kudos for this one, andrea! very impressive! (and yes, i am a new yorker through and through).

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 11:07:00 AM

    Oh Lord,my God,I pray I do not neglect or shun the beauty - powerful Andrea - J.A.B. %

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 10:58:00 AM

    Oh my, this is a very tearful write my friend! I am greatly moved by this incredible poem Andrea! It's sad that this does actually happen in today's society and people only think of themselves and not about their own children! This can very well happen one day, so sad! Wonderfully written piece here! Great Work!!

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