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Waiting to slip away

The mysterious stranger could wait no more
He grew more impatient as he paced the floor  
His clients always pleaded for more time
But those pleas  were usually declined

Then the client heard the footsteps getting near
The time had come;  It was just as he had feared
He heard the tapping on his door
And begged for time, just a little bit more

The stranger then entered the room
A sudden chill, a sense of doom
The client slipped away round half past eight
The Grim Reaper was not inclined to wait
He had many more clients to see that day
And in the blink of an eye he slipped away
He just couldn't wait to take their  breath away

contest by -  Black Eyed Susan
name of contest -  Wait


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  1. Date: 10/26/2012 8:04:00 PM

    Interesting concept. The Grim Reaper has clients, implying they pay (in some way) for his services, however unwanted they may be. Usually we see those taken away by death as victims. Nice switch up.

  1. Date: 8/2/2012 12:11:00 AM

    Joseph... Congratulations with your awesome win in Susan's waiting contest... what a WAIT..lol ;-) ~xox PD

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you PD
  1. Date: 8/1/2012 1:49:00 PM

    Congratulations on your placement in Susan's "Wait" contest Joseph. Love, Carol

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Carol
  1. Date: 8/1/2012 9:14:00 AM

    congrats on your win! a creative take on the contest! scary too :)

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:30:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you so much Susan
  1. Date: 7/31/2012 3:36:00 PM

    Too cool...An awesome 1st place win!!!

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:31:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Caleb
  1. Date: 7/31/2012 11:26:00 AM

    ((()))Congrats on your great winning work.Everyone definitely wants the grim reaper to wait...Sara

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thanks Sara
  1. Date: 7/31/2012 8:54:00 AM

    congrats Joseph on a brilliant first place write and win luv.. an amazing piece to think on..

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Linda
  1. Date: 7/31/2012 8:52:00 AM

    Congrats on your win :), good poem with just the right amount of foreshadowing

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:33:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Luis
  1. Date: 7/31/2012 7:22:00 AM

    the mystery of this piece is awesome, joseph! congrats on your top win with huggs!

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:34:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thanks nette
  1. Date: 7/31/2012 6:21:00 AM

    Hey Joseph, congratulations. Love.

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:34:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Sherese
  1. Date: 7/31/2012 5:22:00 AM

    Love it Joseph...Congrats on your big win!!!! Excellent my friend!!!

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:33:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you G
  1. Date: 7/31/2012 1:11:00 AM

    Brilliant loved it first time, Congratulations Joseph xx

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:30:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thanks Mandy
  1. Date: 7/30/2012 11:45:00 PM

    Great write Joseph...congrats on your win.

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:28:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thanks Jonas
  1. Date: 7/30/2012 5:04:00 PM

    Joseph, congrats on your well-deserved first place win! A scary write!! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:27:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thanks Rhonda
  1. Date: 7/30/2012 4:04:00 PM

    Congrats on Your awsome win!!!!

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/30/2012 4:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank yo so much Sabina
  1. Date: 7/30/2012 3:39:00 PM

    No wonder you did so well. This poem is the best Joseph. I love it. Congratulations on your win.

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/30/2012 4:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Peggy...I am over the moon with this win
  1. Date: 7/30/2012 2:38:00 PM

    Congratulations on your 1st place win Joseph, this is a wonderful write indeed. As Always, Shar

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/30/2012 4:28:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you so much Sharon
  1. Date: 7/30/2012 2:29:00 PM

    joseph congrats on your win, oohh creepy..David

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:36:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you David
  1. Date: 7/30/2012 1:50:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win. Loved the eerie aspect of the poem.

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 8/9/2012 7:35:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Suzette
  1. Date: 7/30/2012 1:32:00 PM

    Joseph, congratulations on your well deserved win First Place in Susan's contest today. Hugs and love, Gail

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/30/2012 4:27:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for those nice words Gail
  1. Date: 7/22/2012 6:15:00 PM

    Love to read eerie one's like this,,,,,, I wrote one called "grim reaper" you have a great day ;}

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/30/2012 4:26:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Debbie...
  1. Date: 7/21/2012 9:59:00 PM

    Joseph, I feel the tension. keep writing. Enjoyed.

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/30/2012 4:26:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Sherese...
  1. Date: 7/20/2012 2:56:00 PM

    OOOh, scary; and eye opener for sure! :)

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/30/2012 4:25:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Elizabeth...
  1. Date: 7/20/2012 4:23:00 AM

    Brilliant poem Joseph - wish you luck in contest. - oxox love Anne-Lise

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/20/2012 6:22:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thanks for those kind words Anne
  1. Date: 7/19/2012 4:52:00 PM

    wow, this is quite inventive. I like it a lot. The last line too. Awesome.

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/19/2012 8:22:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you for those kind words Andrea, I appreciate it
  1. Date: 7/19/2012 4:52:00 PM

    If I know Susan well, I think she will like it!!

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/19/2012 8:21:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I hope so Andrea...
  1. Date: 7/19/2012 9:08:00 AM

    Ooh this is scary , I think its great xx

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/19/2012 12:43:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thanks Mandy
  1. Date: 7/19/2012 5:50:00 AM

    A chilling write, you brought the theme through beautifully with your words Joseph :)

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/19/2012 12:43:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thanks Wilma
  1. Date: 7/19/2012 2:32:00 AM

    Joseph, how are you doing... i hope you are doing fine... this is a very gripping thought and poem..thank you for sharing..pd

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/19/2012 5:11:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I am doing good PD..thanks for your comments I appreciate it...
  1. Date: 7/18/2012 12:16:00 PM

    Very suspenseful and chilling. Love it Joseph. Hugs, Gail

    May Avatar Joseph May Date: 7/18/2012 2:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Gail;...I appreciate your kind words
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