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Love Hurts - a shanzi

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Love Hurts - a shanzi

hairy white hands
clenching into fists

jaw tightening quick
I step backwards

his eyes throwing 
sparks my breaK-ing 
nose, my broken heart

For the "Shanzi" contest

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  1. Date: 1/18/2013 9:43:00 AM

    an oldie,, and wow this is a powerful statemant...

  1. Date: 8/6/2012 9:11:00 AM

    A very strong poem in a short form, Susan. Nicely penned.

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 5:20:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Joann's "Shanzi" contest Susan. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 7/22/2012 10:26:00 AM

    Susan congrats on your win, now this is something else, I love it..David

  1. Date: 7/22/2012 9:43:00 AM

    WAY TO GO on your well deserved win, Susan. Awesome!

  1. Date: 7/22/2012 9:31:00 AM

    Your poems always grip my heart. Love should never hurt. Congrats on your win! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

  1. Date: 7/22/2012 9:20:00 AM

    Susan - I hope you have not drawn from personal experience; tragic. These past two are heartbreaking. love, Kathy

  1. Date: 7/21/2012 3:15:00 PM

    ((()))Congrats on your winning work..Sara

  1. Date: 7/21/2012 8:05:00 AM

    Congrats Susan on your win!Enjoyed the read!

  1. Date: 7/21/2012 5:24:00 AM

    congrats Susan on an amazing win for this incredible write.. feeling the essence of your words luv..

  1. Date: 7/21/2012 4:09:00 AM

    A very expressive write Susan, Congratulations on the win!

  1. Date: 7/20/2012 12:01:00 AM

    when repaired,sometimes, broken hearts beat more boldly - expression keeps you alive, thanks - J.A.B.

  1. Date: 7/17/2012 9:15:00 PM

    You sure make this guy sound creepy, Susan, with those hairy white hands. Jeepers! A great way to portray a violent relationship!! I was happy to get your recent comment and see you here. Yep, it's been a bit dead lately!

  1. Date: 7/17/2012 4:42:00 PM

    wow so revealing Susan as u describe the worst abuse luv.. best wishes.. a heartbreaker.. thankxx so very much for ,my win in your Forgotten contest so honored u enjoyed my words from first hand experience with the kids and seniors in my part of town.. it is sad to see them so down and forgotten luv

  1. Date: 7/17/2012 12:22:00 PM

    rich expressions with pained notes yet beautifully crafted,susan... winning huggs!.. thanks for my placement in your forgotten contest... it was a sad poem too!..:) huggs!

  1. Date: 7/17/2012 11:43:00 AM

    Hi BES hope your ok, liked this, good luck in the comp, all the best Owen

  1. Date: 7/17/2012 11:05:00 AM

    Powerful! Thank-you for sharing!~Tammy~

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 8:33:00 PM

    Lol..good see... good luck... you see..pd

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 7:34:00 PM

    your brutal! but i guess violence is also; i have to give you a pass.

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 5:41:00 PM

    ouch! great poem, though - hope it's fiction. good luck in the contest!

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 3:45:00 PM

    Well I hate men that hit women.. I hope this is just a fable for the contest.. Re. my poem, I am sending you a cup of raindrops to guide you along lol Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the compliment on the pic.. blushing oxox Michael

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 3:34:00 PM

    Thank you everyone for your title suggestions! When I read Jack's, it just felt right to me, so I went with that. Thanks again! You guys rock!

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 1:45:00 PM

    B.E.S. - good poem for the contest, wish you luck and hope for a win for you. - oxox Anne-Lise

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 1:21:00 PM

    Hi, Susan. Is he the reason for the black eye? Enjoyed mucho. Put some beef steak on that eye. Love, daver

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 1:16:00 PM

    I've been trying to think of a title - how about 'Love Hurts'? or 'Bruised Heart'? Great poem, Susan

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 12:34:00 PM

    Enjoyed reading your great work..Very descriptive and emotive write..What about Anger's Sparks but might not can do the aprostrophe...Love And Trust Broken could be another possibility...Thanks for stopping by...Sara

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 12:30:00 PM

    heartfelt and scary write here, Susan - so sad to think this sort of thing goes on.

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 11:41:00 AM

    Wow, what a terrible event here! I my heart goes out to you Susan! Terrific write my friend! Great Work!!

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 9:58:00 AM

    great write,BES