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'Fire snuffed Out'



I came across you as I stumbled through a darkened alley shadows of the makeshift fire shed light on your face I wasn't sure if you were smiling or just trying to unnerve me after all it was late and I was alone there I stood almost like I was glued to the spot reluctant to move just in case the shadow of you disappear so I held my pose waiting on you to make the first move you never did, the fire finally snuffed out as it started to rain.. You never said a word, just took off your jacket and covered me with it there I stood as you turned around and walked away
*inspired by the rainy weather in Cape Town* ©150720122100

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  1. Date: 8/5/2012 11:37:00 AM

    Very special write this one,Wilma:) I was drawn right into it,but the ending took me by surprise CTC.Enjoyed reading it,and hope the Cape Town weather has improved since you wrote it:-) Hugs and Love,Arild

  1. Date: 7/21/2012 10:09:00 PM

    Dear Wilma, great story telling. Enjoyed this.

  1. Date: 7/18/2012 12:58:00 PM

    Suspenseful, then the twist of a beautiful ending. Extraordinary Writer! Just going through your art!

  1. Date: 7/18/2012 2:50:00 AM

    wilma i you took me straight to the plot . Every sentance painted a part of the story . Beautiful . Love it. *smiles* RON

  1. Date: 7/17/2012 10:57:00 AM

    I can picture this. Well written. Yes, the weather in Cape Town has been fairly bad lately. Love, Suzette

  1. Date: 7/16/2012 9:32:00 AM

    how engaging, wilms...your words sends a "sigh" in my heart!... i like how this ended.. great stuff!..:) winning wishes and huggs!

  1. Date: 7/15/2012 2:40:00 PM

    so romantic !you saucy girl ,where you been hiding,my sassy lille Wills,missed you much much!

  1. Date: 7/15/2012 1:35:00 PM

    Wow, what an emotional Topsy-turvy event here! Your poem flowed so very nicely; I enjoyed the feel of the write a lot! What a wonderful piece! Great Work!!

  1. Date: 7/15/2012 1:18:00 PM

    Wilma, I love how you switch from fear to hero, very cool...David

  1. Date: 7/15/2012 1:09:00 PM

    Beautiful words penned my dear lady, enjoyed your poem today, have a great Sunday Wilma, nice to read your verse, Vxxx

  1. Date: 7/15/2012 1:03:00 PM

    Warm muggy and uncomfortable here CTH. But your piece puts the reader right next to you. I like that. Cook for you anytime luv. Xoxo Michael