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JUST FOR A LIVING

There is a huge and old 
Banyan tree in front of 
The temple in my village 
Sitting beneath it 
At every morning is 
My habit now 
But the devotees of the temple 
Visit me too 
As they think I am a GOD 
They offer me many things 
In fact I am unemployed 
And decided to consume them 
Just for a living. 




spirituality is very easy to sell

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  1. Date: 6/23/2012 8:18:00 AM

    WOOOOW! Your message is clear: there ARE people that will do or accept anything for a profit and easier living! Articles such as "a", "an" or "the" only precede nouns. "unemployed" is a verb in your poem so it is grammatically improper to write, "AN unemployed". These errors are small in comparison to such a HUGE message! Very good one, JK <3

    chakrapany Avatar jayachandran chakrapany Date: 6/23/2012 8:58:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you .i have modified this poem as your suggestion .thank you .jk
  1. Date: 6/23/2012 2:24:00 AM

    This is a wonderful poem,VERY POWERFUL!!!!

    chakrapany Avatar jayachandran chakrapany Date: 6/23/2012 2:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thanks .jk