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The Difference in daffodils

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Below is the poem entitled The Difference in daffodils which was written by poet Karen Deeks. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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The Difference in daffodils

I step out... Between man made Amber street lamps
And natures midnight blue, still life.... crisp, dampness
Not a soul to hamper, mood nor thought.
Moments before witching hour... Solitude
Strokes
My bitter twisted mind plus soul...

Walking
Waltzing internally through thoughts fields
And daffodils
Barely a murmur

They shiver softly (as I do)
In a
Cool
Crisp....
Mad march air

Cream
Eerie...
Negative heads bowed, both they and I
Are as night time hoodies, shrouded within

Noir prison bar petals

We are akin. The nightime daffodils and I
Skulking in the shadows unnoticed by all that pass
We like it that way... The only difference between I and them

Tomorrow....
They shine outside, tempt bees and eyes
Then smile in the glory
Of day...

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  1. Date: 6/2/2012 3:13:00 AM
    'Negative heads bowed, both they and I Are as night time hoodies, shrouded within' ....how lovely...m

    Deeks Avatar Karen Deeks
    Date: 6/3/2012 12:28:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    thanks you so much Mike for readong and showing me the part you liked best,,, karen :)
  1. Date: 6/1/2012 6:36:00 PM
    You use beautiful imagery in your poetry, i can see from reading this one on daffodils. Love that "mad march air" and how you compare yourself to the ones at night. Why not the sunny ones? I want to see you in the sunshine too!

    Deeks Avatar Karen Deeks
    Date: 6/3/2012 12:27:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Hell Andrea and thanks for your thoughts on this one... I compair myself to the night time daffs at my darker mo's which luckily for me lessen as time goes by...karen :)
  1. Date: 6/1/2012 12:00:00 PM
    Enjoyed reading this one ...Yes, their day may be a short one but beautifully lived..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..Glad that I chose it to read...Sara..Thanks for stopping by...Sara

    Deeks Avatar Karen Deeks
    Date: 6/3/2012 12:25:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you so much Sara for reading my writes today...and ever so glad you liked this one.... karen :)
  1. Date: 6/1/2012 4:06:00 AM
    You painted a beautiful picture here with your words. I could actually see you and the daffodils. An excellent write. Thanks for sharing your gift with us.

    Deeks Avatar Karen Deeks
    Date: 6/3/2012 1:00:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you so muc for your kind thoughts on this p[iece and im so sorry i missed this review somehow.. before... karen :)