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Trident


Years of training
Endure the death of many
Satisfying Caesar’s whim
The baying crowd shout,
They seek blood, I seek freedom
I stand face to face with death

My trident in hand
I muster God’s given strength
To strike my enemy dead
He lunges, I strike!
With empty eyes, angry heart
His weapon drops to the floor

He falls to his knees
The crowd fall silent and wait
For the final blow of death
Death is his freedom!
He asks for a quick, clean kill
It strikes his heart and my soul

© 16/5/2012

for Amy's Choka contest..

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  1. Date: 5/18/2012 11:49:00 AM

    any poem with tridents in it gets my highest rating! David! good work! jimbo

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 9:26:00 AM

    The last two lines summarise the flawless write. But how can such violence be a "game"? Anyway Good luck for the contest.

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 9:07:00 AM

    victory is sweet

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 8:53:00 AM

    Like this David, almost like being there, good luck with this wonderful entry. harry

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 4:24:00 AM

    action-packed with an ending that baffles!.. what a style , david... best of luck and huggs! :)

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 4:03:00 AM

    Oh the bloody games of Caesar- well done David very thought provoking, Brenda and thank you for your comment : )

  1. Date: 5/17/2012 1:19:00 PM

    Wowser,David! Im blown away by the details and emotions in this awesome write.Best wishes in the contest! Take Care,Arild

  1. Date: 5/17/2012 12:50:00 PM

    Excellent! Good luck in the contest. I've never written a choka...didn't know what one was until I saw the contest. I'm not even positive the one I entered is a choka at all.

  1. Date: 5/17/2012 9:17:00 AM

    Dear David - Death = freedom. Your last line is wonderful. love, Kathy

  1. Date: 5/17/2012 8:19:00 AM

    Wow it was really deep and entertaining

  1. Date: 5/17/2012 7:44:00 AM

    Very entertaining..even reading this aloud gave me the chills..love it!!

  1. Date: 5/17/2012 5:47:00 AM

    Lovely written David. wish you luck in contest...hope for a win for you!!! - oxox Anne-Lise

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 8:34:00 PM

    Oh, I really liked the humanity in this! You made me walk in gladiator shoes. So well done. Good luck in the contest. I hope this places high. Cyndi

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 8:14:00 PM

    Hey David...I think my female gladiator and your trident carrying gladiator outta battle it out here on the soup! .....hahahah....this is most excellent! Impressive flow and details! :) Gwendolen

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 6:37:00 PM

    Great work that reads like a winner for the contest..Very good work describing the Gladiator...Good luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment..Sara

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 5:20:00 PM

    WOW, David, have you seen mine? That too is my theme. how death is his freedom. I was amazed to learn they lived very short lives and often fought less than a few times in their lives! Yours is GREAT. And also you used first person, a big plus.

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 3:26:00 PM

    Gladiator ink. Brilliant poetic piece.

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 12:01:00 PM

    I absolutely love this David, you have a vivid imagination, awesome stuff :) all the best for the contest, love Wilma

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 10:59:00 AM

    yikes! what a great ending! so emotional...Wonderful visulaization throughout :) fav poet :)

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 10:29:00 AM

    Great entry for the contest David! It made me visualize what Caesar was watching. I am glad you came out the winner - or did you? I like the line "death is his freedom"

    Williams Avatar David Williams Date: 5/16/2012 12:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    hey Diana, I don't think I did....
  1. Date: 5/16/2012 10:29:00 AM

    Great entry for the contest David! It made me visualize what Caesar was watching. I am glad you came out the winner - or did you? I like the line "death is his freedom"