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                                           piercing the leafage
                                           kaleidoscopic sun rays
                                           on forest old path
                                             the snow shines in cold silence
                                             as spring has not feathers yet







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  1. Date: 3/30/2013 7:58:00 PM

    :-) I can not help on picking my winning poems... I pick them and sort them out to my likings. As a matter of fact, I don't really like it when poets put their names on the bottom of the poems, unless I ask of it. But, that does not really matter 75% of the time I know who the poem belongs to with or with out the name attached. wink! wink! And thanks for putting a smile on my face with that comment.. ha ha.. it made me feel normal. :-) PD

  1. Date: 6/6/2012 12:32:00 PM

    A beautiful scene you paint! Tanya

  1. Date: 5/22/2012 8:12:00 AM

    I am stopping by your poetry to thank you for your kind comments on my writing. It has been a pleasure to read yours today Ruben. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 5/17/2012 10:12:00 PM

    RUBEN , congratulations in Brian's contest.. Take care and have yourself a good night ~ always* PD

  1. Date: 5/17/2012 8:27:00 PM

    Hey, a double purpose poem!! Congrats on the HM with this one. It's so lovely. Still love the feathers line.

  1. Date: 5/17/2012 1:34:00 PM

    Congratulations on you placement in Brian's "177" contest Ruben. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 8:23:00 PM

    A beautiful poem enjoyed your point of view, congrats Ruben, luv vie

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 8:23:00 PM

    A beautiful poem enjoyed your point of view, congrats Ruben, luv vie

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 5:48:00 PM

    I agree with Deb....that last line is stunning and not at all expected!! (sign of greatness!) :)

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 12:58:00 PM

    Love the last line..ohhhh..nice [feathered spring!] Congrad's on Your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 12:31:00 PM

    Ruben congrats on your win,,cool..David

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 11:59:00 AM

    Congratulations Rubin on your HM

  1. Date: 5/15/2012 9:17:00 AM

    Hi Ruben, that kaleidoscope of sun rays piecing the foliaage is such a lovely image to think on. Reminds me of the walks I take each day through the woodlands here with the shadows dancing. I'm really into this one. Luv, Lizzy

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 10:47:00 PM

    This is absolutely gorgeous bro. I'm glad to have you for a BUD. I'll take more of this.

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 9:15:00 PM

    what a wonderful line: as spring has not feathers yet. Love it.

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 3:30:00 PM

    nice one Ruben, love this adaption of the picture you have written for the contest. harry

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 2:50:00 PM

    I especially like the last line..Reads like winning material to me..Enjoyed reading the creativity..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Yes, fast food can put on pounds and hurt the purse strings but one has to eat out occasionally..Most places have a salad or fruit that I like..Sara

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 12:26:00 PM

    This is definitely an attention grabber..great work here Ruben!!

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 11:42:00 AM

    Postcard write...nice! Thanks for the insight on the Senryu....good information. Deals with human, instead of nature.

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 2:10:00 AM

    you grabbed me from first to last lines, ruben.. . such wonderful poetic diction and imagery.. this gotta win!..:) huggs!

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 12:10:00 AM

    You never fail to amaze me with your beautiful poetry.You have a way with tanka Ruben,always did... You got my number one vote... beautiful and going tmfvs!Charma

  1. Date: 5/13/2012 11:23:00 PM

    Smile ˜ Hello, My Dear Precious & Beautiful Friend, Ruben * I Have Always Loved Both The Uniqueness & Profoundness Of Your Wonderful. Poetry ˜ I Find The Bright Colours In Beauty Permeating This Priceless Canvas; 'You Are Amazing & May Yesteryears Ice Melt From Their Smiling Eyes * My Love, Forever;'" John!:) ˜

     Avatar Date: 5/13/2012 11:31:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    * . . "SMILE * OWWW & YESSS * 'A TREASURE IN BEAUTIES FAVES.'" . . *
     Avatar Date: 5/13/2012 11:27:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    ...."Something Deeply Beautiful, About 'This Rarest In Masterpiece.'" *
  1. Date: 5/13/2012 6:18:00 PM

    Beautiful Tanka, Ruben, Wish you goodluck, :) Jag

  1. Date: 5/13/2012 5:33:00 PM

    Nice one here for Carolyn's contest Ruben. Best wishes in the contest. Hugs, Gail

  1. Date: 5/13/2012 2:21:00 PM

    A great tanka by you Ruben!Enjoyed.Best wishes.

  1. Date: 5/13/2012 1:53:00 PM

    Spring come s l o w l y this year - well written Ruben. - oxox hugs Anne-Lise