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My First Bike - To Joann

Inspired by Joann Grisetti drawing





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                                                                               P         i
                                           Rolling                                      n
                                               +                                           g
                                                t  bike. I was seven and 1 / 2.  f
                                             s   *                                           a 
                            e:  w       r           Y                                  s.   s    a    s
                     c                 i                  e          _                l         t                w
                  a                 f      n                 l         \          e       s     e                  i
                 f               i            d                   l       \     e        e          r                 t
                y            M              *                      o     h            i           *   *            h
                m          *   Dad took away the training w  \            s            *             s
                  n                          *                                \_          e                        u
                      o                   A                                                   h                  n
                              d     n                                                              T   *    *
Riding fast on its smooth seat... up and down independently... irresponsibly...
freewheeling around the afternoons, cruising the wind to climb the joy
At the hour of the siesta: my bike, the sun, the wind, and me... 
"all for one, one for all"...How far away are those days? 
Where is the wind? Where is the sun?


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  1. Date: 2/18/2013 10:03:00 PM

    Did the bike change its shape? Ruben, you deleted the only other comment on my haiku....I thought it was fun, but then you go ahead and delete. Fine. Dit is fokken ok.

  1. Date: 9/28/2012 2:03:00 AM

    It so original and impressive!

  1. Date: 9/23/2012 10:11:00 PM

    no no! Ruben you are checking the wrong one... LOL...xox~pd

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 6:11:00 AM

    Congratulations on your well deserved win in Craig's "Concrete/Shape" contest Ruben. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 10:32:00 PM

    WOW...AGAIN... I FEEL LIKE TAKING THIS BIKE HOME. CONGRATULATIONS... WITH YOUR AWESOME WIN..XOXOXOX~PD

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 5:52:00 PM

    Great work, Ruben. Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 2:25:00 PM

    Congrats on your win, Ruben! Quite impressive write and shape. I Love it! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 1:17:00 PM

    Congratulations Ruben complicated one but great shape and verse xx

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 1:08:00 PM

    This one is a great work of art..Congrats on your win..Sara

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 12:30:00 PM

    This must have taken hours to design. Congratulations on your win.

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 12:17:00 PM

    Ruben congrats on your win, pedalling to victory...David

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 12:13:00 PM

    Ruben congrats on your entry and placement--well deserved!!

  1. Date: 7/11/2012 9:01:00 AM

    Visually stunning! Brilliantly composed! You need to print this onto a good paper matted and framed...it is priceless!

  1. Date: 6/10/2012 8:24:00 PM

    Wildly wonderful Ruben, never seen anything llike this before. You did a fantastic job creating the bike and the words compliment the trip. Love it muchly my friend! Luv, Lizzie

  1. Date: 5/27/2012 10:01:00 PM

    Hi Ruben :)! I re-opened my contest, in case you finished your poem already.... Haven't started judging yet...:D thanks!

  1. Date: 5/21/2012 3:56:00 PM

    HA HA! Ruben , i remember this one, a super nice win;-) Congratulations with your bicycle entry. Have a nice day~PD

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 4:07:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win in Gwen's "My Bicycle" contest Ruben. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 11:29:00 AM

    Congratulations on your place in the contest. Great work.

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 8:48:00 AM

    OMG!!! This is above and beyond........how did I miss this gem???? AND>>>>WHY is it not at the top of the list???? when reading it works into a gem of a little poem too! (You my friend, need noooo training wheels when it comes to cleverness!!)

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 8:25:00 AM

    Wow.....just wow...

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 6:00:00 AM

    love this one Ruben, congrats, harry

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 4:53:00 AM

    very creative! congrats on your win!

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 2:14:00 AM

    Whooo clever, must have taken ages, like the poem too Congratulations Ruben xx

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 1:31:00 AM

    Ruben congrats on your win.. I like ..David

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 1:18:00 AM

    First of all, what an poetic artist you are, Rubes...I loved how you were inspired by JoAnn..She inspires me too. Congrats on your great entry..The competition was fierce and the 3 judge panel had to arm wrestle quite a bit over ice cream and coffee. The best place to start with my new contest is your fav's list..do u have any of her work fav'd? If not (shame on you, Pope, I mean poop! hahah...just read her work til something inspires you...U can refer to my last posting for an idea. Bye love! Gwendolen

  1. Date: 5/17/2012 8:42:00 PM

    WAY TO GO in the bicycle contest, Ruben. Congratulations.

  1. Date: 5/17/2012 8:41:00 PM

    Congatulations on your win, Ruben. Very creative. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 5/16/2012 8:40:00 PM

    WOWSER! What a creative approach and just tremendous in so many ways. Though I enjoyed the playfulness of the shape, I did enjoy the last five lines more. CLIMB THE JOY. Yeah, I remember that. Hope you do well in the contest! I'd sure place this way up there. Hugs, Cyndi

  1. Date: 5/13/2012 3:19:00 PM

    Cool wheels Ruben O. Smile. Agape, Moses

  1. Date: 5/13/2012 12:22:00 PM

    Wow, Ruben, this is amazing! I find the shape poem to be almost impossible so I am impressed to say the least. I'm sure it took some time and patience. I hope to see it at the top of the winners list. God bless you and thanks for all the encouraging comments over the last couple weeks. I am feeling so much better. Hugs, Rhonda

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