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what once was bright
is now a terrible fade
an indominable feeling
that hope once gave
i'd look at you and
my heart would melt
in the beginning thats
exactly how i felt
now i've seen 
those feeling depart
and something diminished
pulls us apart
all that extra energy
just seemed to desolve
after suspisions of unfaithfullness
became involved
my illusions decreased
and came to a cease
and my stary stare 
became a glare
what was  once deemed ours
now yours and mine
all of love disitegrated
by one single crime
instead of love
i have the passion of hate
feelings well hidden
as i resolve my fate
looking for a get away
away to escape
an open door
an unlocked gate
once a secret love
now a secret hate
i wanted to be with you
but now i want to escape

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  1. Date: 8/21/2013 12:47:00 PM
    Again, you have some grammatical errors, but as I conveyed in my other review of your work, it absolutely does not detract from its beauty and impact. You can definitely count me as a fan of your rhyming work. I look forward to reading more! :)

  1. Date: 5/28/2012 1:29:00 PM
    Never hate John for God teaches us to forgive and to love. A well done poem. John love phyl

  1. Date: 5/4/2012 8:50:00 PM
    '...passion of hate,' neat phrase. Well composed and rhymed, my friend! Best wishes, Keith3s

  1. Date: 5/4/2012 9:37:00 AM
    there is always a turning table for everything.. A very thoughtful poem, john. Enjoyed this a lot.

  1. Date: 5/2/2012 6:45:00 PM
    Not a personal plight I hope John. Well written, the point is clear. "Love of the Godly kind is never bound, what seems to be hate could be love needing freedom to grow." Agape, Moses

    Loving III Avatar John Loving III
    Date: 5/2/2012 6:48:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    thanks john, for the wisdom you brought. the light of God gives us power to frogive.
  1. Date: 5/2/2012 5:57:00 PM
    by the way..Both love and hate are born of each other.. xox~ PD

    Loving III Avatar John Loving III
    Date: 5/2/2012 6:17:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    i can tell this piece eats at some people.
  1. Date: 5/2/2012 5:54:00 PM
    Thank you John, for a very lovely and deep thought. and when i say lovely..i mean the thought that came with the get away image.. I can not relate to your pain, or the the feelings that confuse you.. However your words are deep and full of grieving and confused feelings.. thank you for sharing your poem with us.. have yourself a very wonderful day ;-) LINDA

    Loving III Avatar John Loving III
    Date: 5/2/2012 6:18:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    truthfully. this is how men feel.
  1. Date: 4/28/2012 2:22:00 PM
    Strong and emotional poem here, John! Thank you for sharing this! oxox always Laila

    Loving III Avatar John Loving III
    Date: 5/2/2012 6:19:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    wow! i thought you were a little girl.
  1. Date: 4/27/2012 8:48:00 PM
    Love that turned to hate...But....I think I still see love.Very nice & emotional write John.

  1. Date: 4/26/2012 4:55:00 PM
    You pour such emotion in your poems John; another great one to stir up the mind! Luv, Lizzie

  1. Date: 4/23/2012 11:42:00 AM
    great ending :)

  1. Date: 4/22/2012 10:27:00 PM
    Sad one of love turned to hate. I like the last two lines how you summed it up with those contrasting lines.

  1. Date: 4/22/2012 2:04:00 PM
    Sad one here..Unfaithfulness is a terrible thing between two that are suppose to be one and only to each other..Great way to express the topic..Enjoyed reading..Yes, those baby oaks are probably fated to destruction..Pity that I could not sell or give them away..Sara

  1. Date: 4/21/2012 12:50:00 PM
    Thank you for visit John - But... I am not being featured on my poem "It is the Market Today" - About yours poem:Not a happy poem....hopeless love life, but very well done. - Have a nice weekend. - oxox Anne-Lise

  1. Date: 4/21/2012 12:45:00 PM
    Raw emotion. Loved it!

  1. Date: 4/21/2012 12:16:00 PM
    Hope this is not true, John. You have the worst of luck sometimes, but I pray that happiness and love will come your way. Hugs, Catie :)