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A Romance Made of the Evening Twilight in the Woods

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A Romance Made of the Evening Twilight in the Woods

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dusk's serenade when we laid doubts and swayed like ferns you were ahead with unsaid words to tread a path love as a pit the moon lit late blame it on me
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  1. Date: 10/1/2013 8:51:00 PM

    ha i like this one... good win....SKAT

  1. Date: 9/30/2013 12:21:00 PM

    Contest Winners: In the Woods. Sponsored by: Caleb Smith. - Congratulations on your wonderful poem in this contest, Ruben. - Pleased to read your poem, well written! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 9/30/2013 12:06:00 PM

    this is awesome... congrats..Linda

  1. Date: 4/14/2013 7:34:00 PM

    Rereading this beauty since i think i read each poem of yours..i reread this beauty..beautiful...sad....and beautiful ..and veey sad...and extremely beautiful...Charmaine

  1. Date: 11/4/2012 2:06:00 PM

    Just wonderful loved verse 1 the best. Light & Love

  1. Date: 4/30/2012 9:17:00 PM

    When emotions a raw it doesn't take much to have doubts and words unsaid often speak louder than tose spoken. We won't blame it one you,,,ever! Beautifully sad Ruben.

  1. Date: 4/26/2012 12:30:00 AM

    So, I had to spend a few moments here to see if I could grasp a little bit of this form, before I read what the books say...I think I did, thank you for being my teacher today :) As for he sentiment...I find the pit always as deep as the love that was felt..."blame it on me", well those words nearly tore me apart. Wonderful work Ruben.

  1. Date: 4/25/2012 3:36:00 PM

    I sense so much sorrow in this poem, Reuben. No, don't blame yourself when things don't go well. Outstanding write! Thanks for your comment. Love you, Carolyn

  1. Date: 4/23/2012 7:17:00 PM

    ahhhhhh.....this is nice.....so nice.

  1. Date: 4/22/2012 12:32:00 PM

    Smile ˜ Alright, but I won't hold it against you, my dear ˜ Love always, John!:) *

  1. Date: 4/22/2012 4:19:00 AM

    I've never written in this form Ruben, i like what you have here, in fact, they are awesome. harry

  1. Date: 4/19/2012 4:48:00 PM

    Enjoyed reading your creative work..Sara

  1. Date: 4/19/2012 6:49:00 AM

    outdid i meant >:/ wuff,,,my typos....sorry for that.!

  1. Date: 4/19/2012 6:48:00 AM

    Than-Bauk isn't easy Ruben... and you out did it wonderfully...Somehow sentimental as is the title.. Beautiful.. I can know you did it without seeing your name..Charma

  1. Date: 4/18/2012 1:59:00 PM

    RUBEN!!!... how could you forget your name, awhhh!!.. i love this... congrats from my heart.. this is a winner, winner for me... :) hugggs!

  1. Date: 4/18/2012 4:31:00 AM

    So wonderful, romantic and charming Ruben. xoxo - Laila ;o)

  1. Date: 4/17/2012 6:37:00 AM

    Now that's what I 'm talkin' bout!....A crafty lil than bauk!....I fell asleep on mine last night..I think I drempt of vampires too! ha ha...Elegant swaying ferns...Laffing intensely from Chris's lead poisoning remarks....gotta watch out for the lead poisoning while you are out there too ya know....haha. :) Good luck, Gwendolen

  1. Date: 4/16/2012 11:04:00 PM

    P.S. - I do enjoy the sentiments in this poem a lot. Again, if I am off-base with the second stanza, please ignore the comment.

  1. Date: 4/16/2012 11:02:00 PM

    Lovely sentiments, Ruben. If I am wrong, then I am easily willing to be wrong, but I don't want to leave you walking around with your rhyme-fly undone. I don't want to over-step the boundaries, but there seems to be an issue with the rhyme-scheme in the second stanza, unless 'lead' is the grammatical version pronounced as: led, instead of: leed. If one were to share the lead too much, then there is the possibility of lead poisoning, which might have happened to me. This would explain a lot! Ha!

    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 4/17/2012 7:09:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you so much, Ivan. It was a m-issa-take! I changed it.
  1. Date: 4/16/2012 10:54:00 PM

    It is great to see how everyone thinks the same and yet a little differently with their twilight envisionings in than bauk form. I liked your little comment. Actually, I was not even mad at that guy. it was the guy underneath him that made me really pissed off.

  1. Date: 4/16/2012 8:10:00 PM

    Love it Ruben..I find this form very difficult..but you nailed it. BG

  1. Date: 4/16/2012 4:07:00 PM

    A beautiful serenade, Ruben! Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Rhonda

  1. Date: 4/16/2012 12:09:00 PM

    This poem is very beautiful Ruben. Love, Gail

  1. Date: 4/16/2012 11:59:00 AM

    Charming and lovely written Ruben. - oxox Anne-Lise

  1. Date: 4/16/2012 11:30:00 AM

    Just awesome!!!

  1. Date: 4/16/2012 6:59:00 AM

    SO beautiful, reads like a romantic interlude enjoyed your words Ruben hugs vie