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While you criticize me

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While you criticize me

I ask myself 
Why must I follow the blind
Are these lies just fogging their mind
This path of devastation
That’s filled with lies of infestation
Is just right in front of you
This is just too sick to be true
But even if I try to turn away
Nothing will be good enough that I say
Everyone will just push me back
I need to build up the courage that I lack
To say that this is insanity 


You think your right
And that your following the light
While you criticize me
You’re innocence is all that you see
But every step you take is leading you away
From the Truth!
This frustration is killing me
While you criticize me!


Is it too much to ask
Or is it too big a task
To just let me be
All your faults I can now see
Why can’t I just be myself today!
These lies that your saying
Are clearly just fading
They are just too far from the truth
I need to get out of your loop
I don’t mind being different
If it takes me away from YOU!


You think your right
And that your following the light
While you criticize me
You’re innocence is all that you see
But every step you take is leading you away
From the Truth!
This frustration is killing me
While you criticize me!


You wish I would synchronize to you
Everyone else will just do as you do
So all you can do is sigh
Because I won’t shrink up and DIE!

 
Watching everyone follow you is just sick
It’s just like a blind man trusting his stick
Now they are heading to their doom
While I’m safe in my room!



You think your right
And that your following the light
While you criticize me
You’re innocence is all that you see
But every step you take is leading you away
From the Truth!
This frustration is killing me
While you criticize me!

I’m free of your bondage
No more insanity
I’ve escaped this nightmare
Of living in your shadows
Now I have found the Truth!
Because I got away from YOU!


Criticize me
It doesn’t matter what you say
Criticize me
I’m not following your ways
Criticize me
I’m different in every single way
Criticize me
Because I’ve found the truth!


You think you’re right
And that you’re following the light
While you criticize me
Your innocence is all that you see
But every step you take is leading you away
From the Truth!
This frustration is killing me
While you criticize me
While you criticize me
While you criticize me
While 
You 
Criticize
You Criticize 
Criticize Me!

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  1. Date: 4/16/2012 10:16:00 AM
    I am currently enjoying how you play with the lyrics and the rhymes, however this is the only warning I give you, you have repeats that bug me and your rhyming at time can feel slightly forced. But, I'm more than happy that you have finally joined this site! (After my harping at you) :)

    Mitchell Avatar Zach Mitchell
    Date: 4/24/2012 9:09:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    thanks!
  1. Date: 4/16/2012 6:18:00 AM
    A warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer to you Zach. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. May the sun shine on you that you might find great joy in your life. Love, Carol

    Mitchell Avatar Zach Mitchell
    Date: 4/24/2012 9:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    thanks! it means alot!