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Steps

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Below is the poem entitled Steps which was written by poet Tim B. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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Steps

Take them up a bit Step down and disconnect yet Well oriented
Follow the rhythm Fall into run, then schism Palladium's glow
Hang on, two flights left Three ahead then go right Welcome home, goodnight
All this time, and the elevator still remains 'Out of Order.'

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  1. Date: 7/16/2012 4:11:00 AM
    Hi TIm, stopping by to say good night~PD

  1. Date: 4/17/2012 7:27:00 PM
    haha, Tim, I love the ending of this. And how the elevator is still out of order. thanks for your comment. I love writing sonnets, I do.

  1. Date: 4/17/2012 2:56:00 PM
    you make me rave, tim... a collection of delight and surprises... into the winners' list!!.. fantastic!..:) huggs!

  1. Date: 4/16/2012 5:48:00 AM
    Good one..Got a chuckle and don't know if you intended it to be funny...Thanks for stopping by..I appreciate the little note about me leaving out a word in my work "Corrosion And Rust"...I wrestled with that line for I was trying to a count of 8,6,8,6..I tried all kinds of ways to make it work so I left it without the I or we....I figured the human mind would say I or we should be there..Thanks again..Sara

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    Date: 4/16/2012 11:56:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I did intend a chuckle :). Yes, on your poem I did surmise that you may have done it on purpose, but thought I would make sure. You are right though, the mind does generally interpret the word as being there. Thanks for stopping by.
  1. Date: 4/16/2012 4:31:00 AM
    Nice piece! ;0) xoxo - Laila

  1. Date: 4/16/2012 2:14:00 AM
    Wow great write.