Submit Your Poems
Get Your Premium Membership
Quote of the Day

Quote Left"The harder you work, the luckier you get."Quote Right

by Gary Player

  |  Comment

See and share Beautiful Nature Photos and amazing photos of interesting places

Twilight

Deborah Burch Avatar  Send Soup Mail  Block poet from commenting on your poetry

Below is the poem entitled Twilight which was written by poet Deborah Burch. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

Read Poems by Deborah Burch

Best Deborah Burch Poems

+ Fav Poet

Twilight

"Twillight"*

A 'Swan' in town
can be found on
school ground --that's me

bored and off qi
rain daunts me --'till
I see him there...

can't help but stare
his eyes glare --so
aware...I thirst!


deborah burch
4/10/2012
For: Nette's "Than-Bauk Twilight" contest
_________________________________________
*inspired by the book/movie: "Twilight"

Post Comments

Please Login to post a comment
  1. Date: 4/26/2012 3:32:00 PM
    Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 4/19/2012 4:43:00 PM
    Got a chuckle...Great winning work..Congrats..Sara

  1. Date: 4/19/2012 5:34:00 AM
    Congratulations on your well deserved win in Nette's "Than-Bauk" contest Deborah. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 4/18/2012 12:57:00 PM
    Nicely done...........George

  1. Date: 4/18/2012 11:41:00 AM
    Congratulations on your inspiration. And win. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 4/18/2012 5:58:00 AM
    Congratulations on your well deserved win Deb xx

  1. Date: 4/11/2012 9:49:00 AM
    Sweet write Deborah , Best wishes ,Declan xxx

    Burch Avatar Deborah Burch
    Date: 4/11/2012 10:01:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you so much Dec...it's good to see you...BIG HUGGS (((((O))))),love deb
  1. Date: 4/11/2012 2:51:00 AM
    hi susan... the first 3 lines are okay.. treed on 4th line doesn;t seem to rhyme with "machine", and so on... you got 6-9 lines right.. did i make sense or are you more confused??.. let me know!..:) huggs!

    Burch Avatar Deborah Burch
    Date: 4/11/2012 2:57:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    lol...no nette, I understand now...and I can't blame this on my blonde hair either :O!! Let me see what I can do... thank you so much...lol..love, deb
  1. Date: 4/11/2012 2:11:00 AM
    thanks for joining, deborah.. so nice!.. kindly check rhyme pattern and syl count... i have placed an example on the contest page.. if you need to revise, just edit and update your poem... will do another blog on this later!:) huggs!

  1. Date: 4/11/2012 12:36:00 AM
    Great write.

    Burch Avatar Deborah Burch
    Date: 4/11/2012 12:54:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanx Elliot, so much...big huggs,love deb