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Somewhere Else

Somewhere else
                                        the sun is rising
the day ripens
                                        on a slick branch
continues to grow
                                        its leaves fanning
its scent attracts
                                        swallows and bees
a breeze stirs
                                        the grass below
but not the ants
                                        between the blades
until day falls
                                        the branch bends
beneath its weight
                                        shadows rise and
continue to climb
                                        only then the ants
look up to see
                                        their faces in the sky

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  1. Date: 9/24/2012 10:39:00 PM

    Still wondering where you went.

    Davis Avatar Darryl Davis Date: 9/26/2012 9:03:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Apologies for the extended withdraw...been busy with some other projects elsewhere. I will try to post something here soon, though ;-) Hope you're well :-)
  1. Date: 6/22/2012 8:53:00 PM

    Darryl, where did you go? I just happened upon one of your comments from a while back and it got me curious to know if you were active. I miss your poetry!

  1. Date: 4/27/2012 5:36:00 AM

    An interesting poem arrangement I am undecided which way to read it, line by line, column by column, two separate pieces side by side, this will provoke some inteesting writing exercises, thanks for sharing, enjoyed.

  1. Date: 4/14/2012 5:24:00 PM

    Darryl, you impress me with this one....wery good! Wish you all the best. - oxox love Anne-Lise

  1. Date: 4/2/2012 6:07:00 PM

    What an awesome image this poem invokes. I love how you stylized this poem for that purpose. :) Always, Laura

  1. Date: 4/1/2012 11:35:00 PM

    1st read; a "fleshed out haiku" for lack of a better compliment. 2nd read; the feel of each vignette settles in. 3rd read; Is it somewhere else, too? Very nicely layered. - Chuck

  1. Date: 4/1/2012 6:43:00 AM

    Very thoughtful poem Darryl, so much said here. This would be an interesting form especially if it could be read side to side and down each column---would be fun challenge.