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water all around



water all around—
a man on a raft’s last breath
dehydrated







022020121038p

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  1. Date: 3/22/2012 3:58:00 AM

    Oooohh this is haunting nikko...sad and scary! :)

  1. Date: 3/18/2012 8:42:00 AM

    Very touching haiku. This reminds me of Unbroken, a book by Laura Hillenbrand.

  1. Date: 3/14/2012 7:52:00 PM

    Nikko, sweetie, go see the poem by Gail Doyle that your blog inspired from her!!!

  1. Date: 3/3/2012 11:05:00 PM

    Nikko,hi..... this reminds me of a dream i once had... but, instead of being dehydrated... my bed became a water bed... lol...kidding... wait that was no dream... okay..anyways.. back to your haiku.. I think water is the scariest thing around.. besides snakes.. very deep, i could never imagine taking my last breath surrounded by water.. i would surely die before dehydration... excellent poem..always..pd

  1. Date: 2/25/2012 3:05:00 PM

    Such deep meanings in this piece Nikko the Sweet!! Glad I stopped by to read you today , now on to our beautiful friend from Cape Town. Luv n hugs Michael

  1. Date: 2/25/2012 10:07:00 AM

    wow a heavy visual here Nikko.. amd such an emphatic picture painted luv.. where u be??? sweet friend...luv..

  1. Date: 2/23/2012 10:51:00 AM

    I think this contest is so tricky...I like how you approached it..Love ya,,,now that I know that this is you---FUN KNEE!!! ha ha. Gwendolen

  1. Date: 2/22/2012 11:07:00 PM

    This is nice. I still like that other one better.

  1. Date: 2/22/2012 11:08:00 AM

    Lol your connection is morbid, so you can't be all morbid... :D

  1. Date: 2/22/2012 10:54:00 AM

    A very descriptive write, Pen. Nice haiku. Love, Kim

  1. Date: 2/22/2012 10:45:00 AM

    I will never be a haiku expert but I absolutely love this Missy!! Cool line at the end ;-) oh and btw don't you dare be morbid hehe *mwahugs*