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Ariel

A cry made to heaven, wings spreading wide
tears clear as chrystal, her lover has died
Fallen from grace for a meer mortals love,
her cries seem to echo like a lone mourning dove

Do not forsake me for this one foolish act,
for I only reached for something I lacked
You made us from light, and love it is said,
now look where that love you gave me has lead

Angels descending, bring from above,
echoes of mercy, whispers of love
Our Lord sees your tears, knows of your pain
and knows that from sorrow, there's nothing to gain

Return now to heaven it's where you belong,
our Lord has forgiven all you've done wrong
And kneeling to touch her dead lover's face,
she said her goodbys with heart renching grace

For the contest "Fallen Angels"

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  1. Date: 2/21/2012 5:56:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in ~Tracie's~ "Fallen Angel" contest Linda. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 2/19/2012 6:52:00 PM

    wow, so far, yours is one of my favorites. I love the way you made a tragic love story of the theme. Congrats on your win, Ariel.

  1. Date: 2/19/2012 3:33:00 PM

    Congrats! This is a very beautiful poem..X-celent write. :o)

  1. Date: 2/19/2012 3:00:00 PM

    congratulations!

  1. Date: 2/19/2012 1:20:00 PM

    Congrats. Linda on your special win, love,vie

  1. Date: 2/19/2012 1:05:00 PM

    Linda, congratulations on your beautiful talented poem today in Tracie's Fallen Angel contest!! Light and Love, Gail

  1. Date: 2/19/2012 12:57:00 PM

    This one is a real tear-jerk-er, Linda. I love it too!! Congrats on painting a superb storyline in rare couplet excellence! Gwendolen

  1. Date: 2/19/2012 11:34:00 AM

    Congrats Linda on your win in the contest.Beautiful poem.Enjoyed the read.

  1. Date: 2/19/2012 11:16:00 AM

    A beautiful, bittersweet poem you have written. Congrats on your win! Blessings, Rhonda

  1. Date: 2/19/2012 10:51:00 AM

    Linda, awesome poem. A well deserved win. Congrats on winning 3rd place in Tracie's contest.....................S.Ronthorpe

  1. Date: 2/19/2012 6:59:00 AM

    congrats Linda on a wonderful win for this elegant entry and write on Angels theme..

  1. Date: 2/19/2012 6:00:00 AM

    Congratulations a smashing write a deserving win xx

  1. Date: 2/19/2012 5:05:00 AM

    very nice. congrats on the win~

  1. Date: 2/10/2012 9:28:00 AM

    What a wonderful day I am having sitting here reading such amazing poetry. I am glad yours is amongst the ones I am enjoying reading today Linda. Thank you for sharing it. I hope you have an inspirational weekend. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 2/9/2012 9:33:00 PM

    quite a poem! Good Luck in the contest!

  1. Date: 2/9/2012 9:25:00 PM

    Nice poem with decent descriptiveness and rhyming. Just one little thing: you can remove the apostrophe in "see's" in the third line of your third verse. Take that apostrophe and place it in "lovers" in the third line of your fourth verse. Everything else looks good.

    Rutherford Avatar Linda Rutherford Date: 2/9/2012 9:51:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you for the review, and the help. Did the changes and hope they were all I missed. Wish more people would review like you do. Thanks again....Linda