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COME DIVE THE LEAVES



Come dive the leaves in varnished shades along a sway in rippling sets from green and mauve to orange blades come dive the leaves in varnished shades in swirls of iridescent braids while all soft twirls adorn wind’s nests come dive the leaves in varnished shades along a sway in rippling sets As glassy sheen weaves through the trees leaves bend in worship through hummed light while turning cheeks flushed from the breeze As glassy sheen weaves through the trees and through ribbed stalks, stars dance in flight that flicker through fine bower’s eaves as glassy sheen weaves through the trees they bend in worship to hummed light In pure delight, I watch their world on mounds of leaves, God’s tokens fall like healing psalms where hills stand tall in pure delight, I watch their world content with wisps like saintly call a lush brocade entwined and furled in pure delight, I watch their world on mounds of leaves, God’s tokens fall © triple triolet in iambic tetrameter . …. .. by nette onclaud

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  1. Date: 2/7/2012 8:17:00 AM

    Congratulations to you on your win in Debbie Guzzi 's "Change for the Meter" contest Nette. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 2/6/2012 7:56:00 AM

    Congrats Nette on your win!Beautiful poem.

  1. Date: 2/6/2012 1:28:00 AM

    nice win, thank you, Al

  1. Date: 2/6/2012 12:57:00 AM

    You sure got some awesome lines here, nette! I can't help but want to dive in those leaves as well! Beautiful series of triolet! Galing naman! Super congrats on your win and hugs :)

  1. Date: 2/5/2012 5:50:00 PM

    Some of the lines are heart breakingly beautiful yet I long for the pause given by punctuation, the emphasis given by the transferance of a complete clear thought. I like the lighter font! The ending was perfection from [In pure delight down!] Congrad's on your wondrous skill! [I'd love to see your paintings?] Light & Love

  1. Date: 2/5/2012 3:57:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win, Nette, beautiful use of words! Maureen

  1. Date: 2/5/2012 12:22:00 PM

    A beautiful read nette Congratulations xx

  1. Date: 2/5/2012 11:45:00 AM

    Beautiful poem, Nette! Congratulations for your win in Debbie's contest! hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 2/5/2012 11:24:00 AM

    Let's see, you've got about every figure of speech, done in rainbows of colors with light but deep images done in triple triolet (I'll have to look that up) all marching to iambic tetrameter.........and I'm often content to rhyme a couplet! Great Win

  1. Date: 2/5/2012 10:59:00 AM

    Your meter never falters and your triolets are beautiful. Congratulations on yur win. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 2/5/2012 10:36:00 AM

    Nette congrats on your win, a great Triolet..David

  1. Date: 2/5/2012 10:20:00 AM

    Congratulations on your triolet win here Nette, 'enjoyed the many aspects you displayed here..)

  1. Date: 2/5/2012 9:25:00 AM

    Congrats Nette on your win in Debbie's contest!!! Hugs, Gail

  1. Date: 2/5/2012 8:54:00 AM

    Congratulations Nette. Nicely done

  1. Date: 1/24/2012 10:14:00 PM

    I am glad you truly like the jar write Nette bc I was thinking something when I wrote it...how would Nette describe me running with my jar in my parent's front yard..that's how I came up with a few of those lines...Thanks for inspiring me..There is a part 2 to my Soup Mail that I am trying to think of how to write...check tomorrow...smiles...Gwendolen

  1. Date: 1/24/2012 6:44:00 AM

    Thank you for your kind comments on my writings Nette. It was a pleasure to read your poetry today. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 1/24/2012 1:44:00 AM

    it's almost sacred nette. like you're the leaves and the watcher at the same time too. beautiful poem, good luck on the contest

  1. Date: 1/23/2012 6:39:00 PM

    yikes another form not my specialty..okies I will assume you KNOW how to do triolet ;) [I think english is your second language too? fret] okies here is is my take on some of the meter UP TO line 5 all good [TILL THEIR HUSHED TWIRLS aDORN WIND'S NEST] I hear no rise or fall except for the [a] in [adorn] so I need you are Andie to help me? I do not hear [till THEIR hushed TWIRLS OR aDORN wind's NEST] to me they are all HARD consenant sounds rapid fire

  1. Date: 1/23/2012 7:53:00 AM

    Yes, God's tokens falls, lovely poem enjoyed something extra ordinary, loved it. Best wishes for the contest, bl

  1. Date: 1/22/2012 10:09:00 PM

    oh, and yes, you used all the correct rhymes on this one!

  1. Date: 1/22/2012 10:08:00 PM

    Meter perfection, lovely lady!! and imagery to boot. this for sure will make the winners' list!!!

  1. Date: 1/22/2012 8:10:00 PM

    You have captured the heart of the leaves Nette, lovely write, love, vie

  1. Date: 1/22/2012 12:21:00 PM

    This is a fantastic write for Debbie's contest...sure to be a winner! It brought me a sigh of joy while reading your poem. I enjoyed it so much! "...in pure delight, I watch their world" wow Nette, that's a great line! Awesome Work!!

  1. Date: 1/22/2012 10:15:00 AM

    Beautiful imagery, Nette. Love, Kim

  1. Date: 1/22/2012 9:42:00 AM

    I am no expert on metered poetry....but I know what is beautiful, and this is it !! :)

  1. Date: 1/22/2012 8:39:00 AM

    amazing imaginative write.. all the best, jag

  1. Date: 1/22/2012 6:26:00 AM

    Wonderful Tiolet by here Nette.Very nice imagery.Enjoyed the read.Best wshes.

  1. Date: 1/22/2012 6:23:00 AM

    May I also comment on how much I adore the details and couplets you chose..you mentioned the glassy sheen--I love that. And they bend in worship...they worship so uniquely compared to God's stationary creations like the mountains...and my fav line of all...like healing psalms where hills stand tall.....just magnificent. I hope you are worshiping Him along side me this morning. Love, Gwendolen

  1. Date: 1/22/2012 6:19:00 AM

    I am deeply impressed with this poem of yours, Nette. From a lil girl, I was the one who would still be outside at dusk reraking and reraking the piles of leaves to continuously dive into the center. I will call this one ..My Ode to the Leaves..lol...I know nothing of meter..Deb has challenged me to experiment along with the group during the contest..I think I shall..what form do you recommend..Make it easy tho..I might hit my can..ha ha. Your poem sure took me back to the happiest of days..A great way to start my Sabbath.