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Below is the poem entitled TO JAMES FRASER FROM CYNDI MACMILLAN which was written by poet Cyndi MacMillan. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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Gracious poet with a passionate quill,
This Scotsman’s proud of his home, the highlands,
While bending a rhyme, his imagery spills,
The pen and page are both at his command.

Clever with language, he plays slight of hand,
Daring to illicit blushes and thrills,
This poet gives what all women demand ~
Gracious poet with a passionate quill.

His heart and mind are as strong as his will,
Read of his world and your mind will expand,
Lines ask us to “take a walk in the hills,”
This Scotsman’s proud of his home, the highlands.

A true gentleman, not one to grandstand,
Our Inverness lad weaves stanzas with skill,
Never verbose, his tales we understand,
While bending a rhyme, his imagery spills.

We delve his soul, for such fullness fulfills,
Some things that we read we can not remand,
Enchanted is verse which makes the blood still,
The pen and page are both at his command.

Caution, rushed reader, prepare for quicksand,
His message first burbles like a warm rill,
Then builds to crescendo, a concerto grand,
So softly revealed in his humble trill~
Gracious poet

For Debbie Guzzi's Meter Workshop. I thought I'd entered this into a contest, but hadn't. This, I believe, is written in iambic pentameter. I'm not interested in placing, and would prefer NOT to, but I am very interested in receiving feedback on meter, and providing whatever meager insight I can lend in this area. Hey, I'm a fiction writer. I know little of meter, except what I've learned via tinkering and recognizing good meter in what I read. If this is enough, here you go. Have at her. Rip, rip, tear, chop. Hugs, Cyndi

"Take a walk in the hills" is a line from James’ Poem Our Countryside
*This is done in Dorothy Parker's rhyme scheme of a rondeau redouble, which bent the rules somewhat. :-)

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  1. Date: 12/21/2011 9:36:00 AM
    He is all you say and more, one of the people to love here on Soup. Love you too Cyndi and wish you a Merry Christmas my dear. Lizzie

  1. Date: 12/21/2011 7:53:00 AM
    The best to you in the contest Cyndi. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 12/21/2011 4:56:00 AM
    It's wonderful