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Haiku

My first attempts at haiku


Lost Youth

she gazed on memories
and reached to claim the shadows
of lost youth


Heat

he struck a match
her face emerged in the glow
he felt the heat

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  1. Date: 7/7/2012 7:16:00 AM

    These are two of the best 'Haiku 'poems I've come across . For a first attempt you hit the nail on the head. They have deep meaning , read them twice and then stoped and thought about them.I would call them Senryu rather than Haiku but they are sure beautiful .Anne

  1. Date: 6/21/2012 3:30:00 PM

    BTW... LOVELY HAIKUS!!!

  1. Date: 6/21/2012 3:29:00 PM

    What I love about these pieces is their uninterrupted flow and grammatical correctness. That being said, the emotions... sadness at a love lost, and passion at a new love growing... are exceptional! Love, Keith :)

  1. Date: 6/5/2012 2:19:00 PM

    pretty good intent...

  1. Date: 5/13/2012 1:33:00 PM

    I quite enjoyed this Lizzie! I will probably never get around to grasp the whole drama surrounding haiku but I really enjoyed your attempt at it... Hope your weekend is a good one! Love Wilma

  1. Date: 4/2/2012 1:10:00 AM

    I, too, just took my first shot at haiku. Heat is especially rich! Keep writing. - Chuck

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 9:11:00 AM

    Very good for your first attempt. Definitely keep writing these.

  1. Date: 1/4/2012 8:06:00 PM

    It was good to read this one again. Thank you for your kind comment on my final post. I wish you the best with your writing and with life in general. Blessings to you. Karen

  1. Date: 11/9/2011 8:39:00 PM

    Nice use of imagery. Haiku is a very difficult form to master. Hope you keep at it as there are a lot of markets open for those who master this form. Best wishes. Karen

  1. Date: 11/4/2011 8:36:00 AM

    missed u , friend..thnx for your visit..surprised to learn that this is your first attempt at haiku..but they r awesome, especially the second one which should rank among some of the best i have seen for a while

  1. Date: 11/4/2011 2:48:00 AM

    excellent Elizabeth, the second one especially is awesome, love the titles also. harry

  1. Date: 11/2/2011 2:27:00 PM

    Lovely haiku, Elizabeth - I'm just about getting the hang of them now. I hadn't realised how difficult they were until I tried writing them...

  1. Date: 11/1/2011 10:31:00 AM

    I really like these..Very expressive and descriptive.Thanks for the kind review of my work.Yes winter will be upon us soon and has hit some states already...Soup mail..Sara

  1. Date: 10/31/2011 1:00:00 PM

    Both writes are touching here dear poet, now that wasn't all that hard, wer rit ? *smiles* later lady ! Much love, james

  1. Date: 10/31/2011 3:45:00 AM

    Your haiku are gorgeous and so different...must be because your write lyrics...I really like both of these. Very nice comments below from Charles. He is definately an valuable resource! ps..I can feel myself jumping into the first haiku and sharing the same emotions. Gwendolen

  1. Date: 10/30/2011 5:08:00 PM

    Your comment about some haiku looking so effortless yet carry such a message. Strange I just saw a very long paragraph dedicated to that premise last week. That is a mystery about haiku that one can not answer until they have wrestled with one over and over trying to get the wanted expression only to end up tossing it. No matter how long or how short it takes the successful haiku is just as you described. If a person doesn't look at it closely they might would think, what a waste of time.

  1. Date: 10/30/2011 2:34:00 PM

    She touched the face of yesterday to have it feel so cold. These are the lessons we learn in life if we're lucky to get old.

  1. Date: 10/30/2011 10:34:00 AM

    i am not writing them yet,,but i will tell you this is wonderful,,,with rich meaning....

  1. Date: 10/30/2011 7:07:00 AM

    You plan on reigning on all forms of poetry, I am starting to feel jealous...lol Just kidding. Great Haiku, madame

  1. Date: 10/30/2011 5:18:00 AM

    OOOPS I had already visited this page before.

  1. Date: 10/30/2011 5:16:00 AM

    Good haiku elizabeth.I think I have already read these in FB.

  1. Date: 10/29/2011 11:43:00 PM

    For you, its nothing, just pieces of glittering star like words you have used to depict deep meaningful write about 'Lost Youth' and 'Heart'. Carry on awaiting a New bright sun at the dawn of 'Haiku'. My friend, never miss. Thanks for sharing and giving comments on my writes. bl

  1. Date: 10/29/2011 8:11:00 PM

    Be liking your 'ku. I'm surprised this is your first - you have such wide ranging talent in your work and I always enjoy it...the haikus are top notch far as I'm concerned. I write a lot of haikus that are probably "illegal" as far as correct form goes, but I have about a 17 syllable attention span, so there ya go.

  1. Date: 10/29/2011 5:02:00 PM

    hmmm kind of feel the heat from here and then the imagination plays..... Cool Elizabeth

  1. Date: 10/29/2011 12:09:00 PM

    speaks volumes elizabeth in a few lines and words .. emotions are evident in this dynamic expression of reaching for the lost memories.. awesome Haiku luv..

  1. Date: 10/29/2011 10:16:00 AM

    Hey, Rockstar, great first attempt. These are hard for me, too. Keep putting that pen to paper. I almost didn't tell you this, but: I think the count is 5/7/5 for syllables in a haiku. That being said, I liked the feelings evoked in your second one. Happy writing, happy weekend. :-)

  1. Date: 10/29/2011 10:10:00 AM

    Wheww... I loved the first haiku, Elizabeth... a lot! :) I don't really like this form so much, cos it needs plus talent to say something in limited syllables.. greatly done.

  1. Date: 10/29/2011 7:11:00 AM

    * “The Heat of Her Beautiful Love * Reaching for Yesterday When Tomorrow Holds Loves Burning Candle * Beautiful Elizabeth * Luv * Sarah.” *

  1. Date: 10/29/2011 3:58:00 AM

    Very good first try Lizzy. Hope We will get more soon....

  1. Date: 10/29/2011 1:31:00 AM

    LIZ, you need to write more of these if this is truly your first attempt. it shows you are a natural. they are really wonderful..cheerssssss

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