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Gwen

Flibbety Shibbety
Gwendolyn Geritrude
Blackened the windows with
curtains so plain.

Neighborly aesthetic
peri-precautiously
people all decided
she was insane. 



Robert Dixon
My attempt at Double Dactyl.
Let me know what you think.  
Constructively.

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  1. Date: 11/14/2011 3:16:00 PM

    I only learned of this form this morning so I don't claim to be an expert. This is very well written but I spotted a couple of stress problems. The first in line 5: aesthetic is not quite a dactyl. You would have to pronounce it AES-thet-ic, while the natural pronunciation is aes-THET-ic. Also, in line 7: decided, again is not a dactyl. Here you would have to pronounce it DE-cid-ed, and the natural pronunciation is de-CID-ed. But what you have here is an enjoyable read. Good work!

  1. Date: 10/9/2011 6:55:00 PM

    Robert, good attempt,,, ~ENJOYED YOUR POEM,,have yourself a wonderful Sunday~ ;-) take care,..p.d.

  1. Date: 10/9/2011 6:48:00 PM

    hah!! what I think is that this is one of the most difficult forms out there andya did a decent job with it. Happy eve~N

    Jones Avatar Nancy Jones Date: 10/9/2011 6:50:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    and ifya wanna see one i did, soupmail me and i'll direct ya towards it