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GOOD BYE

Mutely, tearfully
Swallowed up, submerged in grief
Remembering calls
You may leave us a message—
At the sound of the tone please…



Caryl Ramsdale
Copyright © 2011  All rights reserved.
Tanka Poetry Form

September 10, 2011

~* Please pray for those left behind on that fateful day, September 11, 2001. *~
My "heartfelt condolences" to the brave families of 911.

“Remembering 9/11” poetry contest sponsored by Carolyn Devonshire

~1st Place~
9/14/2011

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    Judy Ball
    Date: 10/9/2011 10:02:00 AM
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    WoW! I cnn feel the total rejection in this. A good write. God Bless, JB
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    Constance La France
    Date: 9/18/2011 11:08:00 AM
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    What a deserving first place, just an amazing write, sadly beautiful.. and thanks for your ever comments and support of my poetry~~

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:02:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for the congratulations Constance. Your comments are always appreciated my friend. CR
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    frank herrera
    Date: 9/17/2011 10:20:00 AM
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    Grabbed me by My Throat!

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:03:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for reading and thanks for your comment Frank! CR
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    Susan Buchel
    Date: 9/17/2011 9:48:00 AM
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    You've said it all in just a few lines - others have taken hundreds of pages....

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:06:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Susan, the 911 phone calls that aired nailed me to the wall. It was heart wrenching for me. I appreciate your comment. CR
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    Robert A. Dufresne
    Date: 9/17/2011 8:25:00 AM
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    congratulations to you on the personal way you brought this one home to the heart, Caryl.

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:07:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for stopping by to read and congratulate Robert. I appreciate! CR
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    FABIYAS M V
    Date: 9/17/2011 6:07:00 AM
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    It's a gem with a message,Caryl.You are Aversatile writer.LUV.FABIYAS M V

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:08:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Fabiyas, I always appreciate and look forward to your critiquing comments. Thanks again. CR
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    jack horne
    Date: 9/16/2011 1:59:00 PM
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    This really is a beauty, Caryl

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:10:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Jack. You create and leave behind some pretty good ones yourself. Have a great day my friend. CR
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    Andrea Dietrich
    Date: 9/15/2011 10:26:00 PM
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    CAryl, Congratulations on your well deserved win!

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:11:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Andrea! CR
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    Gwendolen R.
    Date: 9/15/2011 5:39:00 PM
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    Paralyzed in fear and speechless...oh yes, this is awesome, Caryl. I also love the 4th line that makes it ultrapersonal. Congrats to u, Gwendolen

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:13:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for stopping by to read and comment my friend. I do appreciate. CR
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    Michael J. Falotico
    Date: 9/15/2011 5:26:00 PM
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    A touching write that deserves to be on top... always Michael

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:14:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Michael...thank you sir! I appreciate your comments and congratulatory remarks. Have a great day my friend. CR
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    jack horne
    Date: 9/15/2011 3:49:00 PM
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    Very moving piece. Many congratulations to you, Caryl : )

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:14:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Jack! CR
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    Black Eyed Susan
    Date: 9/15/2011 12:47:00 PM
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    so much grief. I like how you made something so routine as answering the phone, mean so much. congratulations on your win :)

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:15:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Susan! CR
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    Bob Quigley
    Date: 9/15/2011 10:58:00 AM
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    Nicely said. Congratulations on your 1st place win Caryl

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for stopping by Bob. Your encouragement is greatly appreciated. CR
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    Sara Kendrick
    Date: 9/15/2011 10:11:00 AM
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    Very expressive work..Enjoyed..Congrats..Sara

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks my friend. CR
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    Lee Ramage
    Date: 9/15/2011 12:06:00 AM
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    Oh, this brings goosebumps. Well done, congratulations on this poem. You honour them well. Lee

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:17:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for the congratulations...your remarks are appreciated my friend. CR
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    nette onclaud
    Date: 9/15/2011 12:03:00 AM
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    so well expressed; no wonder it's tops, caryl..sunniest congrats on your special win :) huggs
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    iolanda Scripca
    Date: 9/14/2011 8:31:00 PM
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    Those last messages, those voices beyond graves...very emotional. Congratulations on your top win. Best, iolanda

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:19:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Iolanda, thank you for your encouraging comments. CR
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    Kim Merryman
    Date: 9/14/2011 8:20:00 PM
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    Congrats on your win, Caryl! Kim

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:20:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks! CR
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    Dr.Ram Mehta
    Date: 9/14/2011 8:11:00 PM
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    Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Carolyn, Caryl

    Ramsdale Avatar Caryl Ramsdale Date: 9/19/2011 10:18:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you for taking the time to congratulate! Your words are always an encouragement my friend. CR
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    olusegun Arowolo
    Date: 9/14/2011 6:24:00 PM
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    Fine master piece,Caryl.Congratulations on your well deserved win...may God continue to guide and protect those left behind....
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    Carrie Richards
    Date: 9/14/2011 4:56:00 PM
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    The sound of those messages.....chilling and profoundly unforgettable. This poem is so stirring with emotion...excellent!
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    Linda-Marie SweetHeart
    Date: 9/14/2011 3:39:00 PM
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    Congrats Caryl on a fantastic first place win luv..
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    Debbie Guzzi
    Date: 9/14/2011 2:46:00 PM
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    yes SO fast..loved one could not grasp the happening or the dead their deaths..Congrad's light & love
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    David Williams
    Date: 9/14/2011 2:46:00 PM
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    hey Caryl congrats on your win..David
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    Joyce Johnson
    Date: 9/14/2011 2:41:00 PM
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    Yes, those unanswered phone calls...for so long. congratulations on a wonderful entry and win. Love, Joyce
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    john freeman
    Date: 9/14/2011 2:39:00 PM
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    Captures the scene perfectly Caryl. Congratulations on your worthy first place. Agape, Moses
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    Carol Sunshine Brown
    Date: 9/14/2011 2:06:00 PM
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    Congratulations on your well deserved win Caryl. Love, Carol
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    Carolyn Devonshire
    Date: 9/14/2011 1:32:00 PM
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    Caryl, I got chills when I read your entry. I had visions of family members trying to call the victims and getting a recording. You rose right to the top with this first place win! Congratulations. Love, Carolyn
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    Andrea Dietrich
    Date: 9/13/2011 8:37:00 PM
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    this is a creative way to approach the topic, CARyl. A powerful last line. LUv, Andrea (and good luck in the contest)
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    Doris Culverhouse
    Date: 9/12/2011 6:28:00 PM
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    very sad to remember....some gave all!
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