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---And the Angel Looked On

"I heard an angel speak last night and he said "write" - Elizabeth Barrett Browning 

"Remember..."
that was the last word he whispered before his eyes closed forever...
"Remember..."

I close my own eyes, bite my lower lip, 'til I taste tin, stone angel crying with me...
The wind sends chills through me, as the heavens threatened to weep
brown leaves skittering between my feet, seeking for shelter.
How I related to those leaves: dry...brittle...dead.

I look at the Angel that watches over him,imploring for answers, 
begging this Guardian to take pity on me, help me remember. 
She only looks at me, with tears in her eyes, her beautiful face
always looked enigmatic to me, for she was smiling...
and yet those tears hinted at sadness, 
seemingly reprimanding me with her look.
I bow my head in shame, and reach for her hands, 
but I only feel cold, hard stone...not unlike my heart

My throat catches, I can hardly breathe--
I loosen my grip, feeling it might burn this time
...from guilt, for forgetting...

I glance at her magnificent wings, and wished I had them, too,
if only to fly away, but my feet are stuck on the ground, 
with a heart buried in regret.

I whisper one word: "Sorry":spoken so softly, I think I only said it in my heart;
I say it louder, my body wracked with sobs, my heart bleeding crimson tears of anguish. 
I look at the Angel and notice something on her sash--
One pristine white feather lay there-a stark contrast to the moss covered stone.
I take the feather, notice wordings etched on the sash--and scraped off moss, 
Tennyson's words go straight to my heart...
" 'Tis better to have loved and lost, than never to have loved at all."

The memories come back like a flash flood, assaulting me, bringing me back to that day.
He told me he had an angel carved to be with him at his grave, 
since I, his angel, couldn't always be there for him. And that he understood, 
that it was okay. I shrugged it off, told him I love him forever.
I still do, that's why it shamed me that I also love another now.

Seeing those words, I felt such a sense of peace, like he was embracing me, 
smoothing out my hair like he used to, telling me it was all right. 
I blink back tears, and say "Thank you" this time...I hug the Angel and I felt warm.
Drizzle and sunlight bounced off each other as I walked away. 
I turn my head around to his grave
--and the Angel looked on with a smile.


Constance's Angels in Cemeteries contest
 June 18, 2011 

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  1. Date: 7/15/2011 6:46:00 AM

    nikko, I am finally mailing your certificate for your First place win in my contest. I have no idea how long it will take to get to the Phillippines, but I am walking over to the post office this afternoon and sending it. Love Constance

  1. Date: 7/11/2011 10:35:00 PM

    Aha! Here is a 1st place winner of yours that I haven't seen yet. Whoa. Excellent narrative here. Could this be called prose poetry? Anyway, you nailed this contest, Nikko. Pure human emotions here, that I can really relate too. Yeah, for me this is your poem's strongest suit....even stronger than your vivid details. Congratulations~! Returned soupmail :D

  1. Date: 6/27/2011 8:49:00 AM

    and I just luv Angels and collect them as u know .. tremendous and impressive write my sweet friend Nikko.. appreciate the many comments u left me while visiting PS .. sure appreciate luv..

  1. Date: 6/25/2011 9:41:00 AM

    I DO believe in angels. This one you encountered was a good one. I like to think they are all good. Beautiful work. LOve, daver

  1. Date: 6/25/2011 9:39:00 AM

    Awesome and a great winner, Nikko! Sweet and thoughtful! Loved the read this late Saturday afternoon! Ingat and have a great time! Hugs, Gert:)

  1. Date: 6/25/2011 9:38:00 AM

    Well deserved win my dear sweet second eyes... Congrats to you!!!! always with luv and big hugs Michael

  1. Date: 6/24/2011 7:06:00 AM

    Congrats on your win. Very well deserved. Awesome.

  1. Date: 6/23/2011 12:40:00 PM

    Excellent narration Nikko, full of imagery. Thank you for Tennyson's words... Also thanks for following my poems. Your eyes are so sharp. The apostrophe is missing in one of my poems, I left that out for you to correct my dear ... Haha. Sorry to hear about those typhoons back home. I hope the latest one is not so devastating. I send you my love. Dalila

  1. Date: 6/23/2011 10:54:00 AM

    ey, nikks... anything new?? missing your gems! hi with hugggs.. lakas ng bagyo! :) huggs, nette

  1. Date: 6/23/2011 10:08:00 AM

    Thanks for your comment, Nikko. Be sure to let me know when you post new work! Hope you are having a lot of fun pursuing baking, artwork and other activities. Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 6/23/2011 6:42:00 AM

    What a poignant piece this is. It brought tears to my eyes. It speaks of a sweet love story that ended too soon and she feels so guilty about moving on. Wonderful imagery. God Bless, JBss5f

  1. Date: 6/22/2011 8:03:00 PM

    ......wow....!!!!!!!! awesome dear poet...as Our 16th, I read until the spill reveals mine .....yep ! Much love, james

  1. Date: 6/22/2011 4:55:00 AM

    Ow what an emotional story,very touching..hope ur fine sweet friend,hugs.

  1. Date: 6/21/2011 1:39:00 PM

    This really is beautiful, Nikko

  1. Date: 6/21/2011 11:48:00 AM

    Congrats on your win with this wonderful write...why didn't you remind me to include the first line told by CONSTANCE at the beginning of the poem...I remember you commented on my angel poem:(

  1. Date: 6/21/2011 5:00:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Constance's "Angel" contest Nikko. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 6/21/2011 4:26:00 AM

    I'm so happy to see it there nikko and loved reading this poem again,, A Big Congrats to you on your top spot in this contest,,yesterday as I was about to congratulate you the net connection snapped, electricity too..due to storms. and, we had a good candle light time.huggs...

  1. Date: 6/20/2011 10:22:00 PM

    My goodness, Nikko. I had not even seen this yet. Did you barely get it entered? It's magnificent!! So imaginative. A very well deserved win. I'm happy to see your much success here today at Soup. Luv ,Andrea

  1. Date: 6/20/2011 1:37:00 PM

    My congratulations on the first place win in the contest, nikko

  1. Date: 6/20/2011 12:17:00 PM

    So touching, Nikko. Surely his spirit would want you to move on and there is no shame in loving another. This is a magnificent poem! Congratulations on a well-deserved, first-place win! Very happy for you, Nikko. The ghost contest filled in just a couple days and we are struggling now to judge it. Many good entries and only a few with errors. I'm sorry you didn't make it in time, but just rejoice in this great win now! Love you, Carolyn

  1. Date: 6/20/2011 8:28:00 AM

    Congratulations on your first place win! a lovely write - touching :)

  1. Date: 6/20/2011 8:05:00 AM

    And the angel smiles! If I'd written this, I doubt if I'd have the same ending. This could be easily twisted to something dark you know, want to try? Am I creeping you out now? Haha. Congratulations on placing high up there! Thanks for stopping by mine, btw, you should see it in Word, looks much better there, in red font. Nah, I'm just playing with words, be glad just that and not with knives! Okay...better stop this...am having too much fun on your account!

  1. Date: 6/20/2011 8:00:00 AM

    Congratulations on winning with this lovely piece. Well done, Nikko. :-)

  1. Date: 6/20/2011 7:36:00 AM

    Oh beautiful Nikko. So many emotions, so many images. Many congrats for this win.

  1. Date: 6/20/2011 5:16:00 AM

    oh, so deep nikks... ikaw ba to? really a stellar write as i can relate to this one with parents and siblings passing on.. bundles of congrats on you super super win! :) huggs

  1. Date: 6/19/2011 7:05:00 PM

    You have brought a lump into my throat....this poem makes me remember the conversation we had about losing your brother, and how it left you feeling the sorrow and regrets that are often in each of us at such a difficult time. What a wonderful way to help heal...writing of your love and caring ...it is so evident how much you loved and how much you lost when your brother left you behind. A wonderful poem, Nikko...just wonderful ! Hugs!!

  1. Date: 6/19/2011 6:40:00 PM

    Congrats Nikko on your first place win in the contest with this stunning write my friend..enjoy and thankxx for all your sweet comments.. will reply at some point luv.. so much going on..with house hunting and kitten hunting too..

  1. Date: 6/19/2011 6:25:00 PM

    Congratulations, nikko, on first place in my Angel contest with this sad and beautiful poem, it brought tears to my eyes. It is easy to tell you worked hard on this poem and put much of your soul into it. If you will send me by soupmail, your address, I will forward your Certificate Of Achievment in Poetry, the prize for this contest~~

  1. Date: 6/19/2011 12:43:00 PM

    Nikko,I haven't read other entries for this contest but this should place high. I stayed connected till the last line, loved the emotions you portrayed..Wishing you good luck with this nikko...love

  1. Date: 6/19/2011 12:36:00 PM

    Double Wow Missy!!! you have a winner here, I love how the drizzle and sunlight bounce off each other.. Stunning imagery created with this gem.. I love the message that it is okay to move on when a loved one passes on, we don't have to feel guilty.. All the best with the beauty.. *mwahugs*

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