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He Proposes

An entire landscape, beautiful, indeed
In the heart of countryside, and in the midst
Of well-disguised forest, never published
Overwhelming with joy, overthere we sip

At a place, you may never believe
Evergreen, fall flowing, romantic
Beneath, it's extraordinary peace
Whisperin', confess, together we kiss
Finally there, we want to get married

HE PROPOSES!



Busaba Patanawiroj
3 June, 2011

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  1. Date: 6/6/2011 5:15:00 PM

    This is full of the energy of a courtship! How beautiful THIS landscape...I especially like the usage of "never published." To me this line says, it hasn't been tarnished by the hands of men. So nice and pristine,,,,then the kiss! Gwendolen

    Patanawiroj Avatar Busaba Patanawiroj Date: 6/7/2011 9:52:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Gwendolen, your kind words and encouragement are great for me to continue to improve better works.
  1. Date: 6/6/2011 12:51:00 AM

    Nice build up. An all-out enjoyable read, busaba! Thank you!

    Patanawiroj Avatar Busaba Patanawiroj Date: 6/6/2011 5:38:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks so much...I am just new here for 2 weeks, andso happy many people like my writes.....Kyle, your works are fantastic too!