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Our Eternal Wedding House

Even death could not cause our love to part,
This promise has always sounded so right,
These words of hope still echo in my heart.

When they found his body, tears did not start,
Through this strong shock, I continued to fight,
Even death could not cause our love to part.

Stole to his fresh grave with a garden cart,
Our wedding vows I began to recite;
These words of hope still echo in my heart.

I dug with fervor, my body did smart,
yet never ceased digging all through the night.
Even death could not cause our love to part.

To our wedding house we arrived, stalwart,
Just as the porch was kissed by morning light;
These words of hope still echo in my heart.

Blue and cold, he remained a work of art, 
From my opened wrists flowed the crimson, bright.
Even death could not cause our love to part,
These words of hope still echo in my heart.

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  1. Date: 11/23/2011 4:30:00 AM

    I searched your poems to see how and if I could really do this form, after reading your piece I understand this one a little more, thanks again...congrats to you I believe for your win...luv shannon

  1. Date: 6/27/2011 7:45:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Catie's "Villanelle Me" contest Chris. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 6/24/2011 8:32:00 AM

    This is an incredible piece of poetry!!! touched my heart... Congratulations to you Chris on your excellent win in this contest..gautami

  1. Date: 6/24/2011 6:22:00 AM

    This is amazing Chris. It made me cry. Many congrats on this super win.

  1. Date: 6/23/2011 7:32:00 PM

    wow, like a morbid Romeo and Juliet story, Chris.Wild and dark. So of course, I really LIKE IT. Glad i got to see this one finally. Congrats on a great win, my friend!!

  1. Date: 6/23/2011 3:01:00 PM

    Whew! Hot write Chris! Congratulations to you for the big win. Like reading one of the classics

  1. Date: 6/23/2011 2:42:00 PM

    Many congrats on your win, Chris : )

  1. Date: 6/23/2011 1:12:00 PM

    My congratulations on the second place win in the contest of catie, Chris

  1. Date: 6/23/2011 9:34:00 AM

    Congrats Chris on your super win in the contest with another amazing write .. excellent premise luv..

  1. Date: 6/23/2011 9:25:00 AM

    Dark and mysterious, but I love it, Chris. Congratulations on your win in Catie's contest! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 6/23/2011 8:24:00 AM

    CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR WELL-DESERVED PLACEMENT IN CATIE'S CONTEST. A very good villanelle, Chris. Well done. Hugs, Licia. xxx

  1. Date: 6/23/2011 8:16:00 AM

    Oh wow....romantic and sad wrapped up in this amazing and difficult form!! Well done, dear Chris!!! Congratulations!!

  1. Date: 6/3/2011 8:20:00 AM

    chris! is this you running the extra mile?? yezzz, happy congrats! how lucky i am to be writing amongst the talents on this site.:) hugggs

  1. Date: 6/3/2011 7:42:00 AM

    Another form that is difficult for me....however, you have nailed it as if it were your favorite kind of poem to write...wow!! A Romeo and Juliet poem of love and loss, and death....wonderful work, Chris!!!

  1. Date: 6/3/2011 5:13:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Debbie's "Jack Out Of Box" contest Chris. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 6/2/2011 10:28:00 PM

    Well I knew this would be among the winners, so super congrats to you for this haunting write ^_^! Go write more villanelles, okidoki??? and of course I would write about sleep, haha :p

  1. Date: 6/2/2011 9:22:00 PM

    You are truly an Amazing Artist!!

  1. Date: 6/2/2011 6:07:00 PM

    Congratulations on the win in the contest of debbie, Chris

  1. Date: 6/2/2011 4:55:00 PM

    CONGRATULATIONS!!! a great poetry piece of yours....well-deserved.... so amazing and wonderful!!!!! ****jun-jun

  1. Date: 6/2/2011 3:32:00 PM

    congrats Chris on another fantabulous win by stepping out of the box for this contest and creating a mini masterpiece of poetry my friend.. oh so awesome ..just like u luv..enjoy..

  1. Date: 5/23/2011 7:22:00 PM

    Just Wonderful.Best wishes.Soupmail.

  1. Date: 5/23/2011 12:10:00 PM

    Awesome write, Chris. Denial is one of the first responses to loss. You made great use of the form, my friend. You had me wondering why she was digging the grave herself in the middle of the night. Hmm... Surely a winner in Catie's contest! Best wishes, Carolyn

  1. Date: 5/23/2011 11:22:00 AM

    She really took the "till death" literally hey.. Or is my perception up the pole again? I really love this write of yours and this form.. Maybe I will try it one day when I am big.. You make it look so easy Chris..

    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner Date: 5/23/2011 11:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Wilma, you got it right about her taking their vows literally. But their vows weren't, "'Til death to us part," but instead, "Even death could not cause our love to part." They thought the, "until death," wasn't true and strong enough.
  1. Date: 5/23/2011 9:58:00 AM

    Hmm, ooh you out-sneaked me with this one, writing from a woman's point of view (hmm I didn't think of writing it from the opposite sex's view!) And a bit twisted as well-- did I get it right? She committed suicide to be with her love? definitely a different take on death not causing their love to part(y)--> (haha the y sneaked in and decided to leave it in), since she actually used death to be with him...interesting --let the love party continue lol--kidding aside, very gripping villanelle

    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner Date: 5/23/2011 11:46:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Heya Nikko. Yeah, I took it from the woman's perspective. And, I suppose the envelope looks a bit lonely up there.
    P.iNk Avatar binibining P.iNk Date: 5/23/2011 10:01:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    oops! I meant withOUT-- one pitfall of this reply feature?? you Can't EDIT! hahaha. :p
    P.iNk Avatar binibining P.iNk Date: 5/23/2011 10:00:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    & oh shucks! I noticed you don't have that star by your name anymore? that envelope thingy looks kinda sad and gray with the yellow star & that notepad thingy beside it :( oh boohoo
  1. Date: 5/23/2011 1:53:00 AM

    searing with lines that soften the melody of death's thoughts.. winning wishes if for a contest, dear chris.. amazing! :) huggs, nette

  1. Date: 5/22/2011 11:45:00 PM

    A lot of passion written into this. Must be for a contest to tackle a villa. Good one, Charles