Submit a Poem
Get Your Premium Membership
spacer
Pinterest button
Comments Inbox

 
About This Poem

The Silver Outline

The Silver Outline ~ * ~ * ~ * ~ " And God took a handful of southerly wind, blew his breath upon it and created the horse." ~ Bedoin Legend In the magical moonlight The silver outline you see; Is a greyish white Mustang, A wild horse I am. Rambling free in the vast grasslands... The long coarse skeins, my dark grey manes; Dwells the blustering wind. Early dawn When air is wrapped in fleecy clouds, I swim in the silent waters deep. Mermaid locks leave behind a trail. A canter, that's a hush, a heart that mellows; Yet so strong , yet so rugged. Thunder in the mountains, Rolling fierce rain. No fear I know, As I go galloping, pacing long wild grasses.. Waves in a stormy sea. Artists for eons strove, To hold in their brushes Lightning beauty. Spirit unlassoed, in my knowing eyes Hid behind my long eyelashes white. Mystery unfathomable, In my heart lies; Wings which unfurl as I fly, Taming the wind, blowing a gale. Wild horse of the prairies, I am. ~~ 4th place win in the contest For PD's : "My Best Pet or Animal Poem" Honorable Mention For kristen bruni's contest : "If I Was Animal What Would I Be?" Written by Gautami Phookan

Please Login to post a comment
Next>|Last
 
  1. Date: 9/23/2011 3:08:00 PM

    I really enjoyed riding along on this wonderful write again, Gautami! How have you been? It has been a long time, I actually was wondering about you just the other day-- I haven't been too active at the Soup lately, heehee... so nice to hear from you and I hope all is well-- thank you for passing by my writes-- heehee sorry I am being weird, I just get crazy with changing my names, even if I totally LOVE my name, haha! :D enjoy your weekend!

  1. Date: 7/5/2011 4:39:00 AM

    An excellent write, with strong poetic imagery. Congratulations on being a winner! Robert.

  1. Date: 6/26/2011 3:08:00 PM

    ahhh a sweet write. Light & Love

  1. Date: 6/9/2011 10:29:00 AM

    Congratulations on a well deserved win in poet Destroyer's "Best Pet Or Animal Poem" contest Gautami. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 6/4/2011 11:28:00 PM

    I am galloping along beside u in the sea of long grass here, Guatami...this was my childhood fantasy, to be a horse! Your choice of words to describe the mystical side of this creature is spectacular! It is so true that spirits of horses are often unlassoed...taming the wind? How imaginative is this line....very smooth...flowing...This is my glowing review! Gwendolen

  1. Date: 6/4/2011 1:40:00 PM

    Amazing write. Sending congrats to you, Gautami : )

  1. Date: 6/4/2011 12:58:00 PM

    great job in contest Luv*Skat

  1. Date: 6/4/2011 9:28:00 AM

    Congratulations on this win in the contest of p.d., gautami

  1. Date: 6/4/2011 9:03:00 AM

    Another win for this terrific poem, Gautami! Congratulations! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 6/4/2011 8:25:00 AM

    A very worthy winner, Gautami. I enjoyed this smooth write. :-)

  1. Date: 6/4/2011 8:19:00 AM

    Congrats Gautami on another terrific win with this wonderful write in the contest my friend.. luv.

  1. Date: 6/4/2011 8:00:00 AM

    Interesting write. Congrats on the win.

  1. Date: 6/4/2011 6:16:00 AM

    this was very good congrats on your win. cory

  1. Date: 5/23/2011 7:37:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Kristen's contest Gautami. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 5/21/2011 12:20:00 PM

    Fascinating - love it. Many congrats on your win, Gautami : )

  1. Date: 5/20/2011 9:39:00 PM

    I am with Kash on this one. it was amazing, Gautami!!

  1. Date: 5/20/2011 8:50:00 PM

    Ooooh mystical and beautiful Gautami. Many congrats.

  1. Date: 5/20/2011 6:41:00 PM

    Congrats Gautami on your win.This one is worthy of higher placement.

  1. Date: 5/20/2011 3:33:00 PM

    the horse.. so graceful and intense like you! relish your win and congrats , gautami.. :0 huggs

  1. Date: 5/20/2011 2:29:00 PM

    I remember this one well, Gautami. Excellent poem. Congratulations on your success in Kristen's contest! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 5/20/2011 2:22:00 PM

    Congrats Gautami on your HM in the animal contest with this awesome entry my friend.. enjoy your very special honor with luv.. super..

  1. Date: 5/20/2011 2:06:00 PM

    Conmgratulations on the win in the contest of kristen, Gautami

  1. Date: 5/8/2011 10:23:00 AM

    What an incredible write, Gautami. Appreciated the note at the top as I had not heard of this legend. Thank you for allowing me to gallop along with you in this magical poem. Went to a ranch once and rode a Mustang there. Perhaps one of the best experiences of my life. They are small horses, but I've never ridden a faster one -- not even the retired race horse I used to ride when I was young. Surely a winner! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 5/6/2011 7:09:00 PM

    running thru prairie and oceans. Make it Pegasus and fly to the sky. THIS IS GREAT. I think yours is probably just about the most poetic one I have seen yet for an animal poem. VERY good job with this one. If the judge loves imagery and free verse, this is sure to be right at the top!!

  1. Date: 5/6/2011 12:39:00 PM

    WoW! This is such a magnificent approach to the contest-- I love how you wrote this Gautami! From the formatting to the actual message-- you became that wild horse-- just beautiful! :) Way to go for this stunner :)

  1. Date: 5/6/2011 11:26:00 AM

    I am convinced in this poem, Gautami, that you are that steed! Awesome-magical-mythical-mystical. A fav. 4 me treasure trove! Gwendolen

  1. Date: 5/5/2011 3:19:00 PM

    How beautiful is this....oh wow!! Love this poem, Gautami!! Well done!

  1. Date: 5/5/2011 5:41:00 AM

    What a beautiful morning I am enjoying reading poetry here at PoetrySoup. I am happy to see yours among those which I am able to read this morning Gautami. May the sun shine down upon you and bring joy into your life today and always. The best to you in the contest. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 5/4/2011 6:15:00 PM

    Wonderful entry with nice flow of expressions on horse, Good luck in the contest, gautami

  1. Date: 5/4/2011 3:07:00 PM

    Very good write indeed!! thank you so much for all your kind comments ,,, Michael

Next>|Last