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Touch Me-Monday

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Touch Me-Monday

NO!
Not now
Damn alarm
Feel like crying
Another Monday
I have to go to work
And still feeling so confused
Look at all those freaking stop lights
Touch me, tell me I am not dreaming
Will one of you damn lights turn green today

It's rush hour? How come we are not moving
Touch me again. With a baseball bat
Take me away from this nightmare
A tropical island please
I’ll touch that alarm clock
With a large hammer
No more Mondays
Feel better? 
Feel good?
YES!


Vince Suzadail Jr
For Nette Onclaud's Touch me count -up and down contest

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  1. Date: 8/24/2011 5:13:00 AM
    this is a great write... I wish you all the best for future...sincerely, akash.

  1. Date: 7/28/2011 11:07:00 AM
    I think we all could visualize ourselves in this situation Vince. No more Mondays would be great. love phyl

  1. Date: 7/28/2011 12:55:00 AM
    Been theere and done that. Looking forward to retirement. Very good feeling in this. Love the imagery. I could see myself in your words. A good write. God Bless, JB

  1. Date: 6/8/2011 6:12:00 PM
    Sounds alot like my commutes, Vince. excellent Etheree . Thanks fo your comment on my poem.

  1. Date: 5/30/2011 1:18:00 PM
    A superb Etheree - a great write. It is always so rewarding to read your well articulated poems. Thanks for your encouraging comments on my poem Mother. I missed the Mother's Day Contest. -Mohammad

  1. Date: 5/1/2011 7:52:00 AM
    Many congratulations on your win in Nette's fine contest Vince. Have a lovely Sunday....:)

  1. Date: 4/29/2011 11:45:00 AM
    Congratulations on your win Vince in Nette's contest. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 4/28/2011 10:42:00 PM
    Definitely FIRST PLACE! Win. Many congrats, Lainie

  1. Date: 4/28/2011 9:00:00 PM
    Congratulations on the big win! Great poem, I sure feel like this on a Monday morning. Well done.

  1. Date: 4/28/2011 5:41:00 PM
    LOL, yup, me and road rage, I hear ya! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 4/28/2011 1:05:00 PM
    Vince, you totally rocked this form, congratrulations on your well deserved 1st place! "Touch me again. With a baseball bat" Haha! Great line.

  1. Date: 4/28/2011 10:37:00 AM
    Just Excellent!!Congrats on your 1st place win,Vince--kash

  1. Date: 4/28/2011 10:30:00 AM
    Oh, Vince, you've spoken my mind :) This is seriously funny!!! I hate Mondays too. Who doesn't? You are an excellent poet/writer!!! Congrats on your bIG win! Love, iolanda

  1. Date: 4/28/2011 10:26:00 AM
    Excellent write on 'bad' Mondays. Congrats on your 1st place win. liked this one..gautami

  1. Date: 4/28/2011 9:36:00 AM
    great job , congrats on your first place win

  1. Date: 4/28/2011 9:32:00 AM
    Wish I could send you a "tropical island," Vince. There are alarm clocks (with padding) that you can throw against a wall to make them stop ringing. Maybe for your next birthday... Excellent work! Congratulations on taking the top spot in Nette's contest! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 4/28/2011 4:34:00 AM
    Congrats Vince on your first place win in Nette's contest with this exquisite entry my friend... a lovely lilting piece of poetry ..enjoy your top spot for a top notch poem..luv..

  1. Date: 4/28/2011 12:23:00 AM
    I started to write for this contest and took a similar angle...u have some serious hatred for Mondays, don't you? Hilarious write! Congrats on your first place win! Gwendolen

  1. Date: 4/27/2011 10:51:00 PM
    Oh this one is so cool, Vince ^_^ you got me smiling a lot here, and I really liked how you did yours, starting with No! & ending with Yes! Very witty etheree on Monday ^_^ Super congrats on your 1st place win ^_^ --- btw-- can you pls tell me the title of your stream write? Thank you :D

  1. Date: 4/27/2011 7:39:00 PM
    Excellent. Congrats on a great write.

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