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A Weed in a well kept Garden

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A Weed in a well kept Garden

There, my eyes fixed on the yellow paving stone.
Amongst a slightly tangled dandelion leaf is a
little purple demon staring back at me.
Just stood casually as the suns rays continue
to bounce vividly off the heated ground.

I notice those pointed eyes all sharp and looking frightened,
that I might disrupt his peaceful unity with the warm breeze.
I won't, but I'll remain enchanted by such presence.
His gold earrings reflect many colours of the passing day,
as they appear all the way up those elongated ears.

A tiny ruby shines from a chain around his neck
and there I see the hour glass dangling unthreateningly.
The indents of aged muscle mould above his chest bone
to form perfect pectorals.  On each tiny nipple is another hoop;
only, they are bronze in appearance, almost wilting in their achingness.

I'm overwhelmed as I thought I recognised the curling of his mouth,
a smile for me. I smile back uncertain if he would think I am afraid.
Then his sharp ivory teeth poke out and I know I have done a good thing.
The greens of his emerald eyes enlighten the evilness,
he just wants fresh air from the summers sky as I do.

A tail slivers like a python in the air with a triangular form at its end.
His nails look dangerous on the edges if his twig like fingers.
But I do not feel them piercing my soul.
For his hour glass is not pouring any golden sand on this day, no.

So I watch him leave and I am left to thoughts about a small world
with the beetles, flies and mice.
I find myself then laughing at such mythical fantasies.

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  1. Date: 3/7/2011 11:18:00 AM
    Congratulations on your winning poem in Debbie Guzzi's contest Jodie. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 3/4/2011 11:10:00 PM
    Hi Jodie, this is incredible, just love the way you have taken a everyday situation(Like A Weed) and spun this story around it, brilliant. Harry

  1. Date: 3/4/2011 10:39:00 AM
    Very interesting poem. The purple weed with emerald eyes and ivory teeth brought you some incredible inspiration. Congratulations on your win! Best wishes, Carolyn

  1. Date: 3/4/2011 10:10:00 AM
    A big thanks for all the lovely, encouraging comments. I'm really enjoying being a part of the Soup :-)

  1. Date: 3/4/2011 8:33:00 AM
    Very imaginative. Congratulations on your big win. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 3/4/2011 6:16:00 AM
    Congrats Jodie on your dynamic win in Debbie's contest with this brilliant entry luv.. enjoy and happy weekend...

  1. Date: 3/2/2011 2:47:00 PM
    Thought provoking write with meaningful expressions, Jodie

  1. Date: 3/2/2011 2:33:00 PM
    Just wonderful Ilove it. Might I please suggest in the title any word 4 letters or longer be capitalized, my uncle was aREAL ;) editor and he made me aware of this! Wonderful entry! Light & Love