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that one girl

Holding hands consumed
by another would be love
on a quiet path
she smiled at me so shyly
but was gone in a heartbeat

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  1. Date: 2/22/2011 11:18:00 AM

    How sad you had to loser her "in a heartbeat," Stephen. She sounds special. Lovely poem! Love and best wishes always, Carolyn

  1. Date: 2/20/2011 2:17:00 PM

    I had a "one guy" who was the best hand holder ever. Wow I miss that!!

  1. Date: 2/20/2011 2:04:00 PM

    enjoyed this...love,Deb

  1. Date: 2/20/2011 1:02:00 PM

    I'm studying tanka..do you think you need the "by" line 2? remember strict 5/7/5/7/7 is no longer needed in modern English writing of Japanese form..and line 5 maybe include a sensation? gone like the wind's heartbeat..what do you thinK? just trying to talk to poets to learn about tanks writing. Light & Love