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dancing ballerina 2-to revise

open wings in waltz,silk ripples in dormant waves,shadows in still lake

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  1. Peranteau Avatar
    James Peranteau
    Date: 1/14/2011 3:38:00 AM
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    Hey lady, how are you ! I've been following this Monoku, your doing just fine here ! I can't wait for the finished product ! Lets go with it dear poet ! *smiles* much love, james
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    Robert Pettit
    Date: 1/10/2011 2:16:00 PM
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    You have described a lot in just one line of words.

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    Andrea Dietrich
    Date: 12/30/2010 9:11:00 PM
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    celine, this seems to be revised more than when I first read it. It's looking GREAT! Remnds me of the ballet of the same name. And hey, I just thought of something. That black swan movie has not come out yet around here Gosh where could it be??? Thanks for your sweet comments and mail today/yesterday. LUv, Andrea
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    Matthew Anish
    Date: 12/30/2010 8:04:00 PM
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    Dreamy work! especially like the line - "shadows in still lake" Happy New Year Matthew Anish
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    Linda-Marie SweetHeart
    Date: 12/30/2010 6:11:00 AM
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    thankxxx Celene my sweet and dear friend.. appreciate your encouraging comments always and hope u enjoy a Happy New Year with rich blessings and luv always... the best to u from us here in Garden State..with luv..
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    Hitendra Mehta
    Date: 12/30/2010 1:49:00 AM
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    Celene - thnx for reading my work "I am what I am" and liking it. Happy 2011.......... Luv/best wishes ....Hitendra Mehta

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    binibining P.iNk
    Date: 12/28/2010 11:24:00 AM
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    just dropping by here again to say HI and wishing you all the best in 2011 sweetie-- hugs to you -- nikko :)

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    binibining P.iNk
    Date: 12/16/2010 11:20:00 PM
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    Hi Celene :) very intriguing how you would revise this-- I think it's already very nicely done -- I like how you make it sound so graceful yet also a bit mysterious at the same time with the mention of shadows-- been a bit busy myself as well lately -- let me go check my blog after this-- thanks for dropping by there sweetie :) & for your compliments :) I had a lot of fun doing that :) -- hugs to you :) -- nikko :)
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    John Rhinem
    Date: 12/14/2010 11:50:00 AM
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    Smile ~ Again, I hope that "Your Beauty" is doing wonderfully &, wherever "Your Splendours" life may lead this path afore "Your Star-Light;" may it Always be bright!? ~ "My Love & Warmth to 'You Always' &, All You Love, 'Forever,'" John! ~ Smile, "Have A Very 'Blessed & Beautiful' Day 'My Dear, Priceless Tinkerbell,' Amid The Everflowing Tides of, 'Serenities Beautiful Love;' Bye, 'Precious One!'":) ~
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    John Rhinem
    Date: 12/14/2010 11:38:00 AM
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    Smile ~ "This 'Is Beautiful 'My Dear, Beautiful & Precious, Tinkerbell!!!'" ~ Such a serene moment captured amid this lovely paintings canvas; loves colours softly splashed within gentle hues; pastel sanguine hearts unfolding as wings these, whispers of two souls; forever entwined as a lifetimes loving "Swans; 'Creations Beauty,'" themselves ~ "A Masterpiece; 'Just As Yourself!!!'" ~ ....Cont:)
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    Linda-Marie SweetHeart
    Date: 12/13/2010 8:00:00 PM
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    SOUP MAIL>. Celene... luv..
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    Ruben O.
    Date: 12/13/2010 11:31:00 AM
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    Lady C? ... You are Lady C?!! : )
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    Ruben O.
    Date: 12/13/2010 11:31:00 AM
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    Beautiful Senryu, Celene! TMFs! Ruben.
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    James Peranteau
    Date: 12/13/2010 7:56:00 AM
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    This is a beauty dear poet ! It's like a post card ! great Monoku ! much love, james
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    William Kershaw
    Date: 12/11/2010 8:26:00 PM
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    Lady C, Mysterious, Sensuous and Inviting all at once. Merci bon, mon ami, et joyeaux noel. Love, Will
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    Annalise Brigham
    Date: 12/11/2010 5:34:00 PM
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    Very picturesque Monoku..perfect to dress a wall... Blessings and peace always, Audrey
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    Andrea Dietrich
    Date: 12/11/2010 5:25:00 PM
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    Celene, I am waiting to see a movie called The Black Swan. Have you heard of it? this kind of gives me the feeling of what that movie title implies. I would like to see this a dark poem! Luv, Andrea


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