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Lucila

So I walked into my local supermarket
to buy my weekly shipment of Kit Kat bars,
Cinnamon Toast Crunch,
and Ovaltine powder mix.

As I shake off the snow on my fake Timberland boots,
my skin,
coated in frozen animation,
thaws into warmth’s teardrops from
the supermarket’s 75 degree vents.

This moist sense of happiness was quickly interrupted
when I heard Wilson Phillips, “Hold On”
over the PA system.

Thankfully, the cutlery isle was just to my left. 
So, now, I had plans!

But, before I could commit felony’s song,
I saw her.

A Portuguese goddess
with a strut that can ruin a man’s dignity.

She had Autobahn curves,
dark brown curls of hair & visuals,
and thick flesh meat that even Vegans would envy.

Her face lacked Maybelline coated misapprehension.
Thank God!
Cause I never did like clowns.

After staring longingly at her,
like a crack head with impulsive eyes upon a broken/unlabeled bag of baby powder,
she breezed past my stifled posture and clocked in to work.

She didn’t even get a chance to smell my $500 cologne called “Piece of Me”.

So with new-found urges to grab all my groceries,
like a burglar who really has to pee,
I rush to express checkout. 

There she is.

Her register beeps in coupon lady’s rhapsody,
while my register needs a cleanup on Isle 9.

Now it’s my turn.

With girlish inner-screams of boy-band intensity,
I say, “Hi”.

She scans my apples, while I scan her melons.
The melons that the customer ahead of me didn’t want…
…they were on sale.

Go fig.

As if she read my mind,
she asks,
“Are you feeling warm now?”

“All I want is to be the heat in your moment”,
which I almost said.

But, “Now I am”, is uttered.

As she smiled with seductive demure,
she handed me my receipt
with her phone number on back.

As I left the market,
I began to get cold again.

These winds of change
became gusts of numbness.

I locked myself out of my heart.

I turned around to go back inside.

Only to discover, 
she didn’t have the key.

© Drake J. Eszes

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  1. Date: 7/23/2013 2:30:00 PM

    Wahaha- rushed as a burglar who.needed to pre : ).You re very funny : ).i might as well stole those kitkat and ovaltine from your hands..you wouldn t notice : )..They re my favourite. : ) A lovely poem..It feels so real..makes me feel like a stacker at thr supetmarket observing what s too happen next..Ow gee all.my tins just fell.Very creative

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 7/23/2013 2:42:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Even if I had to pee, I'd have noticed! I have my priorities! Nobody takes my Kit Kat & Ovaltine and lives to tell the tale. =) Thank you so very much, Charmaine. Well, being in the supermarket and meeting that girl who helped me out was real. Everything else, not so much. :)
    Chircop Avatar Charmaine Chircop Date: 7/23/2013 2:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Pee i meant..oops i had to repeat it : )
    Chircop Avatar Charmaine Chircop Date: 7/23/2013 2:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    To happen..
  1. Date: 7/19/2013 9:32:00 AM

    Drake, just wanted to let you know: kudos on all the commenting you are doing to others here. I notice you often at the same poems I am visiting too and I'm glad to see you making sincere comments, not just copy/pasted ones.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 7/19/2013 9:36:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I don't speak robot, Andrea. ;-) If it isn't coming from the heart, it's not real. You're very, VERY kind to notice that. =D
  1. Date: 7/8/2013 7:12:00 AM

    I really like when you write this way and the humor involved. I understand it easily and really enjoyed it. Did the ending mean that you decided not to pursue her. It was really cool how you described this modern goddess!!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 7/8/2013 7:15:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hi, Andrea!!! Yes, that's what the ending meant. :) Thanks so much!
  1. Date: 5/22/2013 12:15:00 AM

    Thanks for the explanation... I figured that's what it was, but I was unclear. I love funny, TRUE stories... they make for great writing material :)

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 5/22/2013 12:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Agreed. :) I'm glad this helped!!!
  1. Date: 5/20/2013 10:49:00 PM

    You have a great sense of humor, my friend. I loved all the zany, slightly corny jokes you threw in just for laughs... "melons??"... OOOhh actual melons... gotcha ;) This whole story was incredibly entertaining... though I have to admit I was confused by the last line... you are talking about a metaphorical key, correct? I'm a little curious as to why she didn't have it... did your feelings for her suddenly change? (I apologize if I seem overly analytic... it's just how I am)...

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 5/20/2013 10:54:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks so much. And, oddly enough, this was a true story...minus the ending. :) Which is why, as you accurately guessed, the end is metaphorical. I wanted to end this humorous piece w/a bit of wisdom. :) I'm really glad you enjoyed this, Tim! :)
  1. Date: 5/10/2013 11:00:00 AM

    Ha! I really enjoyed this one! Sounds like someone was head over heels. However good truth that not everyone you meet maybe "The One"

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 5/10/2013 11:11:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Agreed! Very true. :) Hi & thank you for stopping by here, Caleah! I'm glad you liked this!
  1. Date: 8/28/2011 11:57:00 PM

    Strange things happening in the supermarket these days. Love the "locked myself out of my heart" line. I can idetify. I love this sweet story.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 8/29/2011 7:32:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hi there, again! :) Yes, many a strange thing. Especially in Jersey. lol Thank you so very much, Elizabeth!
  1. Date: 7/5/2011 6:06:00 AM

    Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Drake. May your poetry bring inspiration to others as they read it. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 4/4/2011 8:07:00 PM

    Carol, thank you kindly for that. :)

  1. Date: 4/4/2011 5:30:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win Drake for the contest "The one that got away" sponsored by Thvia. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 4/2/2011 9:01:00 PM

    Carrie, that's truly sweet of you to say. Actually 1/2 of what I wrote actually did happen. :) Thank you kindly! Debbie, thank so much. Yes, the ending was intended to be like that because the moment came to an end and reality began to strike again. I'm glad you liked this. :)

  1. Date: 4/2/2011 1:56:00 PM

    Okies boy were you on a roll, so, edgy & hip and modern and then wah? Your wrap up needs work, the end is not up to the ride [Of course it's a wonderful write just you & I always want to do better aye?] fav lines "She had Autobahn curves""like a burglar who really has to pee" so youthful! And real! Congrad's on your big win!Light & Love

  1. Date: 4/2/2011 7:44:00 AM

    What a delightful story!! So true to life, the feeling of melanchoy longing...you made me believe!!! How much do I love this?? SOOOO MUCH!! Congratulations, Drake!!

  1. Date: 4/2/2011 5:54:00 AM

    Oh my goodness...wow. To everybody that commented these past couple days on this piece that hit 1st with 3 other poets, I cannot thank you all enough! Thvia, that's really awesome to hear! :) Thank you. Harry, there isn't a part 2...but, it is something I can think about. This is a very good start to my day. :)

  1. Date: 4/2/2011 5:03:00 AM

    Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Thvia, Drake

  1. Date: 4/2/2011 2:26:00 AM

    Wow!!!! You painted this whole scene in vivid detail. I was there in the supermarket, next in line. Saw and heard the whole thing. Many congrats on your BIG WIN, Drake. Lainie

  1. Date: 4/2/2011 12:07:00 AM

    Well Drake, this is a very witty and clever poem, a poem where one wants it to carry on (is there a part 2?) one hopes. congrats for this winner. awesome. Harry

  1. Date: 4/1/2011 10:30:00 PM

    Congratulations on an attention keeping poem and your win. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 4/1/2011 9:48:00 PM

    Wow drake. The end id truly super. many congrats dear friend.

  1. Date: 4/1/2011 9:01:00 PM

    I enjoyed everything about this poem. Fantastic delivery of contemporary poetic humor, I just smiled and laughed throughout. Your one-liners are simply classic! I will certainly be looking out for you! On my favorite poet list... right now!

  1. Date: 4/1/2011 8:50:00 PM

    Congrats Drake on your first place win in Thvia's contest with this awesome entry luv.. so happy to be sharing first place with u my friend.. enjoy with luv..

  1. Date: 4/1/2011 8:48:00 PM

    oh wow.. a fave and a sure top hit.. congrats for winning 1st slot, drake.. :) huggs, nette

  1. Date: 12/8/2010 6:25:00 AM

    Hi Carolyn. I really appreciate you stopping by here. The funny thing, with your mention of the ending, is that I came up with those lines first. Then, just went from there. Thank you so much!

  1. Date: 12/7/2010 9:08:00 AM

    Awesome, Drake! The story behind this poem is cleverly crafted to reveal your desire for her. And I love the way you ended it by locking yourself out of your heart only to discover, "she didn't have the key." Truly an excellent and creative poem that draws in the reader. Thank you for sharing this, Carolyn

  1. Date: 12/6/2010 12:11:00 PM

    LOL!! My bad on mentioning it then. HAHAHHA!

  1. Date: 12/6/2010 12:10:00 PM

    Drake, I forgot to mention that I love that song of Wilson Philips ;)

  1. Date: 12/6/2010 12:06:00 PM

    Damn right I turned around. Life is too short. LOL. Tradition says not to. But, I challenge tradition any chance I get. Especially if it allows me to see them one more time. =) Thank you so much, Wilma!

  1. Date: 12/6/2010 12:00:00 PM

    OMW Drake, I absolutely love this.. You had me smiling right through this piece.. Really enjoyed it and the ending was just superb.. You had the guts to turn around at least ;-)

  1. Date: 12/6/2010 11:39:00 AM

    Dr. Ram, thank you very much for that. Just doing what I can. =) -Drake

  1. Date: 12/5/2010 7:17:00 AM

    thick flesh meat that even Vegans would envy nice expression and what a fine description of Portuguese goddess you have penned, Drake