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Departure

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Departure

maybe as I walk away
you can hear that small creaking beneath my feet
no its not the sinking floor
or the opening or closing of a door
rather what you hear my dear
is my heart breaking from pain and fear

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  1. Date: 11/19/2010 4:50:00 PM

    How sad must be such a situation. The poem is very well written and your words portray well the desolatiion. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your kind comments on my poem. Caroline.

  1. Date: 11/17/2010 6:11:00 PM

    deep write Rachel,, liked the ending, enjoyed,..p.d.

  1. Date: 11/17/2010 5:48:00 PM

    Hi Rachel.I found this a beautiful,moving piece.I liked it very much especially how it led to and resulted in your concluding line.A lovely write.Thank you.Love June(S)

  1. Date: 11/17/2010 4:53:00 PM

    Maybe a title might be "departure" Just a thought for this descriptive and emotional piece.