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I got your message

65 minutes reduced to 120 seconds

Bright lit room
White glossy tone with flowery curtains
Upon window's darkened vision

Your radiance emanated in celebratory gesture
As my eyes fell in love
All over again

But your smiles were too bright to see me cry
Dry heaving sadness gasp

As I looked down...I became the great
Pretender

The smile pretender

You wore a dark blue blouse, w/body-fitting jeans
Tall, plus-size model stature
My walking fantasy

Dark brown locks of joy slow danced upon flesh that

I

No longer embraced

You had something to tell me
"I'm getting married to a man who called me, sexy.
We work together in the same building, so everybody knows."

Spanish music behind the scenes
Your witty humor against song
Crackin' my smile within sadness pores

Showing me blank invitations
As I leaned in, inhaling this broken emptiness
Writing out words with her voice
My gentle grin, the eraser

Tears in Cold War mode

Heart enunciating disconnection bliss

"This wasn't how I wanted to see you again"

As satin comforter tries to soften my falling
Falling...into true love's innocence

The same comforter that covered those tracks
Asphalt scarred remnants from the bus you threw me under

"I always wanted you to wake me from my sleep
But not like this"

You became my dream, come true
Becoming dream again
In 120 seconds

...

He may have called you "sexy" with words
But I called you "beautiful" with heart

Yet you will never value how deep it was

Well, at least you can rest assured
That I got your message

© Drake J. Eszes
"True love never dies...even if the recipient never reciprocates." –D.J.E.

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  1. Date: 5/19/2013 9:10:00 AM

    You continue to impress with your work. I especially loved these two lines "He may have called you sexy with words, but I called you beautiful with heart"... WOW! I obviously don't know the extent of what happened in the relationship, so I don't exactly have room to talk... but it did seem that she coming by just to say that... well it sounded like she just wished to put a thorn in your side, adding to insult to injury (and that's just not right)... This reader got YOUR message...

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 5/19/2013 9:17:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Believe it or not, this writing was based off a dream I had. So, it's all true. But, some things were just the dream, some things actually happened. Many thanks, Tim! I'm very grateful. :)
  1. Date: 4/21/2013 12:18:00 AM

    Drake....this is awesome! Amazing tribute to the strength and endurance of true love. Wow! The bit about sexy and beautiful is so touching. I'm so glad I read this. I've written something about the enduring nature of love. "The Heart's Dead are Never Buried." Incredible write....a 7!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 4/21/2013 12:54:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    The fact that you even looked at this piece (near the bottom of my list, posted a few years ago) & commented on it, is super flattering. I'll have a look at that writing of yours. Thanks so much! :)
  1. Date: 11/20/2011 10:56:00 PM

    So sad, such depth of feelings how devastating that the recipient does not reciprocate, such intensity so needs to be embraced with open arms and fly to the stars.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/23/2011 7:59:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I couldn't agree with you more. Thank you so much, Lizzie!
  1. Date: 11/8/2011 9:20:00 AM

    wonderful pen, I think I am in love....

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 11/8/2011 9:47:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    LOL that's awesome of you to say. Thank you kindly! :)
  1. Date: 9/3/2011 10:54:00 PM

    It's about love and yet I didn't get sick of it. Way to transform a tired subject

  1. Date: 8/30/2011 1:48:00 PM

    So beautiful and sad but real. Thank you for commenting on "My Friend"

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 8/30/2011 1:51:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yes...to all of it. Thanks so much for passing by here!!!! :)
  1. Date: 4/2/2011 5:45:00 AM

    Very well said, Wilma. Yes, it's a little weird. Truly. Thank you so much!

  1. Date: 3/31/2011 6:56:00 AM

    Wow, this is so true, sometimes it is weird how some people can just move on as if they were never the center of your world.. awesome portrayal Drake..

  1. Date: 3/19/2011 4:57:00 AM

    Indeed Cassandra. Thank you so much for coming by here. I am grateful. :)

  1. Date: 3/18/2011 11:55:00 PM

    We got your message..nice communicating Cassandra K.

  1. Date: 12/7/2010 6:34:00 AM

    Thank you so much Celene. That's an awesome name, btw. Yes, this piece was deep for me also. Thank you again!

  1. Date: 12/6/2010 4:03:00 PM

    Sad beautiful and deep,touched my heart.

  1. Date: 11/28/2010 4:27:00 AM

    Hey Ryland! Indeed sir. Thanks for your feedback on this. I'll be sure to continue reading your work cause you're damn good. Thank you again! =)

  1. Date: 11/28/2010 4:23:00 AM

    this was .... Epic Drake. a lot of alluing messages frought with thought provoking visuals. ill remember this for times outside of mind. wishing you well in all that you do .... Ryland

  1. Date: 11/22/2010 5:00:00 PM

    @ Carol, that's very kind of you. I really appreciate that. =) Thank you. @ Janette, respect to you for taking the time to read this. I hope you and everybody else gets to return soon to check out more of my work that I'll slowly be posting on here. =) Thank you so much!

  1. Date: 11/22/2010 12:13:00 PM

    Many congrats on your feature this week Rgds Janette

  1. Date: 11/22/2010 11:43:00 AM

    Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Drake. Love,Carol

  1. Date: 11/21/2010 7:14:00 PM

    Hi again Linda! Thank you so very much! =) I didn't know this was featured. Awesome!!!

  1. Date: 11/21/2010 5:14:00 PM

    Congrats Drake on your featured poem this week on the Soup.. a great choice to share with us all luv.. Happy Thanksgiving to u ...

  1. Date: 11/20/2010 3:52:00 PM

    @ Josh, thank you so much man! Great to see you here!!! =) @ Vicki, yes I made it. Thank you very kindly! Yes, I may do the contest thing one day. =)

  1. Date: 11/19/2010 9:35:00 PM

    Awesome write I see you made it and you are getting rave reviews... you are a great poet Drake ,,now lets win one of these contest. love Allrounqueen/Oladeji aka Vicki Acquah

  1. Date: 11/19/2010 8:17:00 PM

    Love it bro.

  1. Date: 11/19/2010 10:24:00 AM

    Hola Ja'Chel! Thank you so much for your kind words! I recently joined too...welcome! =)

  1. Date: 11/19/2010 9:30:00 AM

    that was a-maze-ing! hi i just joined yesterday

  1. Date: 11/16/2010 7:55:00 PM

    @ Destroyer, thank you very much for that. Yes love, like life, flows on. =) Nice to meet you! Thank you for the warm welcome. @ Stacie, well...thank you!!! =)

  1. Date: 11/16/2010 6:19:00 PM

    wooooow

  1. Date: 11/16/2010 5:00:00 PM

    Hello, Drake love sometimes faces the wrong directions,, as for your poem,, it sure makes me think in lots of ways,,, How everything got so complicated one will never know... Love comes with engagements that will never die,, if for some reason someone has to move one,,, love will continue to flow eventually,, Enjoyed your poem,, and Welcome to the soup,,, have a nice day,... Miss P.D.

  1. Date: 11/16/2010 2:42:00 PM

    Dr, it's a pleasure to receive such kind feedback. Thank you kindly. =)

  1. Date: 11/16/2010 1:38:00 PM

    Very creative and enjoyable piece with nice imagery- you have drawn a good difference between what is sexy and what is beautiful, Drake

  1. Date: 11/16/2010 1:12:00 PM

    Tanner, awesome to meet you! Your poem was fantastic. It's very thoughtful that you came this way. You didn't have to. :) Glad you did though. I can assure you, I have plenty more poems ready for all eyes to see. Thank you so much! -Drake

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