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...footfall

footfall 
the cricket ends his song...
no luck tonight

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  1. Date: 11/1/2010 9:30:00 PM

    Cont'd--But in fact, by mixing mother nature and 'nature' of humanity, he is beginning to sound a lot like Izza or Takanura....please don't fall into his little word plays. Anyone who runs a haiku contest from now on, is going to become dizzy trying to play 'footsies' with Phong haha!~Chris

  1. Date: 11/1/2010 9:25:00 PM

    Debbie! I replied to Phong on your blog. I invited him here months ago and now he decides to show up. Don't let him play you--I have known him for many, many years. Don't place him in your contest if he joins! Haha! He is an acclaimed haiku artist who is experimenting far beyond the falsity that haiku should only be about nature etc....I mean he started out that way when he was a boy, but now he is trying things that would be considered a 'no-no' by beginners.

  1. Date: 10/9/2010 10:55:00 PM

    lovely entry, congrats on your win in the contest

  1. Date: 10/9/2010 7:28:00 AM

    Congratulations Deborah on your win in Andrea's Animal Haiku contest >> James

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 8:04:00 PM

    You're funny...and this is hilarious! Great haiku, Deborah! Congratulations on your success in Andrea's contest! Ruben.

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 1:26:00 PM

    Congrats Debbie on your win in Andrea's contest with this impressive entry luv... luv that title too.. enjoy another victory dance..come on now.. with luv...

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 1:14:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win with this great haiku, Deb! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 12:21:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win in the contest Deborah :)

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 11:58:00 AM

    tough luck for that cricket! but really enjoyed this one :) Such a cool take you did here and I am listening to crickets right now-- guess te=hey got all the luck ;) -- Congrats on your win Debbie :) -- nikko :)

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 11:49:00 AM

    Debbie, this haiku is a unique one for sure. Congratulations on your win!~Chris

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 11:22:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win..Sara

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 9:28:00 AM

    Congratulations Deborah on your win in Andrea Dietrich's contest. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 8:28:00 AM

    based on ancient superstition? I do believe I have heard this said...........which of course makes this haiku one of the best and the most clever! Great work!

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 7:54:00 AM

    Congratulations Debbie on your worthy presentation. Agape, Moses

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 5:43:00 AM

    Congratulations on this well deserved win in the contest, Deborah

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 5:36:00 AM

    Here's the reason I don't think it's good haiku (though I am very glad folks like it) I still a seeing (not feeling as much as seeing) 2 images, 1 the person, 2nd the cricket, I think (from study on haiku the lines should give only 1 image BUT this is as close as I could get) I fall into free verse thought. I LIKE my little verse because it has layered ideas (see I back to ideas? yup not haiku enough) idea 1) if you catch a cricket you will have luck 2) the man wants to get lucky with his girl.

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 5:28:00 AM

    congrats on the win!!

  1. Date: 10/8/2010 4:21:00 AM

    Congratulations, Deb. It's very close to what I envision a real haiku to be. VEry nice! LUv, Andrea

  1. Date: 10/4/2010 10:49:00 AM

    I love it Debbie, ~SKAT

  1. Date: 10/1/2010 3:10:00 PM

    LOL@your comment! "Glue Bits" is a cockney rhyming slang for "two bits." So Mary is calling out an advertisement of, "Two bits for a hunk." "Hunk" means you only get to have an "orange peel." If you want to go all the way, one has to pay 10 quid, which in cockney slang="Cock and Hen Bin Lid." lol~Chris

  1. Date: 10/1/2010 11:18:00 AM

    A song of a summer's eve - summer - which has passed once more! Love Matthew Anish

  1. Date: 10/1/2010 9:55:00 AM

    Deb, this is a unique haiku for sure....now lets see what Andrea thinks. I saw your comments about your dialect contest. I played around with a cockney slang dialect yesterday, just to have fun. From my comments, it looks like people can't understand the slang, even though to me, the "codes" are straight forward. I read Sidney Hall's entry and it is spectacular! See, when people are from the Isles, of course their entries are going to rock! Now I am tentative lol~Chris

  1. Date: 9/29/2010 3:54:00 AM

    Nice one! ;-) cricket song the jogger crunches between loose gravel Alan Summers pub. Haiku Friends ed. Masaharu Hirata, Osaka, Japan (2003)

  1. Date: 9/28/2010 9:22:00 AM

    Enjoyed reading your Fantastic poetry today Deborah. Have a wonderful day. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 9/27/2010 1:50:00 PM

    Very good Debbie..best of luck...Michael

  1. Date: 9/27/2010 1:35:00 PM

    Very meaningful and expressive haiku, Debbie. Good luck

  1. Date: 9/27/2010 1:30:00 PM

    Nice play on words -- "footfall" instead of "football," which I always associate with autumn, Deb. Best wishes for Andrea's contest with your haiku! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 9/27/2010 1:28:00 PM

    lovely, good luck in the contest