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Promise

"If I promise to love you,"
I said with a smile, 
"What would you give me?
And make it worthwhile,"

"Would you give me a star,
straight from the night sky?
A celestial body,
to please my own eye?"

"Would you give me the ocean,
filled of the angels' tears?
A big salty pool,
to treasure for years?"

"Would you hand me the forests,
all green with life?
A leafy terrain,
to end all my strife?"

"But wait,"
I say, rethinking my query,
"Nevermind my love!"
I exclaimed, quite merry

"Don't answer that question,"
I explained to my dear,
"I will promise you that, no matter,
just promise the same, and I shan't shed a tear"

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  1. Date: 8/1/2010 1:13:00 PM

    beautiful work absolutely captivating

  1. Date: 7/29/2010 6:10:00 PM

    The promise of love so beautifully written.. - WNN

  1. Date: 7/29/2010 5:00:00 PM

    A great write! And thanks for your comments on my latest. Haha! I understand now. Everything has a good reason and perhaps a bad one too. :) Caroline.

  1. Date: 7/29/2010 4:37:00 PM

    Great.. but Amy Green has the ladies entries for the same contest.. we are collaborating sponsors.. and doing contests is a great way to have your poetry noticed and read more frequently on site... enjoy...with luv..

  1. Date: 7/29/2010 4:16:00 PM

    Excellent write Alex.. enjoyed the soft flow of your words... till the end..it was entrancing... appreciate your wonderful comments on my poetry reads tonight... u should enter some of the contests posted especially mine.. become a 'god' and assume his persona for a poem.. good luck if u do... with luv..

  1. Date: 7/29/2010 4:09:00 PM

    Enjoyed your write ..love the way you ask the questions ,thank you for reading my work sarah xx had to read this twice amazing write xx

  1. Date: 7/29/2010 4:07:00 PM

    this is the good side of love. john h loving iii