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Higher

The wind sketches
memories in the breeze.

Little feet move,
propelling giggles;

“Daddy, push me please!” 

The wind draws
my memories,
transfixed by the breeze 

“To the sky, Daddy! To the sky!”
Soft, faded memories,


The wind blows
and I move.
Longing hangs upon the breeze.
Small feet pumping shrieks;
“Stop, Daddy, stop!
 Please?”

    


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Title; "Higher Please"
 

The wind blows
with it I move
memory stirs with the breeze.

Small feet swinging, beat
giggles;

“Daddy push me please!”

The wind blows
with it I move
retrospection stirs with the breeze.

“Higher Daddy!” “Higher!”
Faint, soft memories.

The wind blows
with it I move
longing stirs with the breeze.
Small feet, pump, pull and shriek;
“STOP, stop” “Daddy!” “Please”

                    - by Deborah Guzzi, 2/10/09 





Contest,  by Deborah Guzzi

"Critcise ME, Take mY Verse & Turn it inside out Make YOUR own!”

Friday, July 23, 2010 


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  1. Date: 7/24/2010 7:54:00 AM

    Very nice interpretation of Debrorah's poem, I am sure she will love it ~ well done ~

  1. Date: 7/24/2010 7:05:00 AM

    My poem is NOT meant as a correction to Deborah's work! Her words triggered memories of my own childhood, and of my dad, now deceased. She painted quiet a vivid picture!

  1. Date: 7/23/2010 5:30:00 PM

    Nicely donely. Good luck in the contest