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Answer Me [Part 1]

Whats supposed to be the order
of things that just happen,
Is it supposed to have a flow
or is it supposed to be random,
The phantoms, I can hear 'em,
Man its too hard
I cant bear 'em,
Memories too vivid
man I wish I could tear 'em.

The pain I can resist
but its the fear I cant handle,
The mistakes that I made
is now flashin' on every channel,
No lights, I need a dazzle,
My freakin' mind
is irrational
As hard as I try
my life turns into a battle

I fight every moment of
my life, Im going crazy,
The whole world's in a riot
and they freakin' blame me,
The devil's tryin' to claim me,
The angels tryin'
to tame me
I try to be the light
But crap; My worries chain me

The pain in my shoulder grows
it compromises the burden,
I fall on my knees, I pray
I wish I could hear him,
But I hear nothing;
It's just a cold wave of silence
I wish I could pull the trigger
And end this freakin' violence.

I was bad God
Now Im scared
Please listen to me
Please God
Please answer my prayer

Do you feel the
Pain that I feel
Why the silence
Answer me
Do you hear me
Cryin' out loud
Are you listening
Answer me

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My original work contains lots of profanity, tried to abide by the rules......
check out part 2 for the end of this song

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  1. Date: 6/17/2010 5:14:00 AM

    Beautiful write and your writing indicate your eagerness to find the answers of your unresolved agonies at the earliest. Faith in God's judgment good or bad is the real test of our beliefs. Have trust and have patient. Good efforts in writing keep the creative pen flowing. Love and best wishes....Ravindra...Oscar Mascarenhas

  1. Date: 6/16/2010 3:15:00 PM

    He hears--He answers! Sometimes we don't pause long enough to listen. The language choice makes this piece feel honest. I see you haven't been at Poetry Soup long. Welcome! Thank you for your kind comment. Best wishes with your writing. Karen

  1. Date: 6/16/2010 9:34:00 AM

    Profanity, my friend, is not necessary. Could be the reason why God is not answering. Your song is well written and the words convey well your heart and soul without the use of profanity. Sometimes before God can make Himself heard, we have to empty ourselves of our concepts and fears, because in God, there is no fear. In my mind, God is not the judge, our conscience is. You have made the first steps to recovery and you will get there, I'm sure. Let go of anger even about yourself. Caroline.

  1. Date: 6/14/2010 3:08:00 AM

    Talented write that profanity would only detract from. The pain and longing emit from the verses and captures the reader. I enjoyed this write and the obvious talent displyed.