Submit Your Poems
Get Your Premium Membership


See and share Beautiful Nature Photos and amazing photos of interesting places



Quote of the Day

Quote Left"The harder you work, the luckier you get."Quote Right

by Gary Player

  |  Comment

stupor

Hai Au Chu Avatar  Send Soup Mail  Block poet from commenting on your poetry

Below is the poem entitled stupor which was written by poet Hai Au Chu. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

Read Poems by Hai Au Chu

Best Hai Au Chu Poems

+ Fav Poet

stupor

clouded by
careless bravado
i say 
too much
this good night

clouds have gone 
and I am
in the spotlight
of moon shine

loose lips
break the silence

but no one hears
the confession 
of a fool
intoxicated
under 
the influence
of you

Post Comments

Please Login to post a comment
  1. Date: 4/1/2011 9:07:00 AM
    Breathless and breathtaking expression of one in luv.. Hai.. it is a joy to read your lines and absorb their meaning luv.. hope u enjoy a happy weekend with luv..

  1. Date: 9/20/2010 11:27:00 AM
    Nice, "intoxicated" love the last stanza, enjoyed your write, =(^.^)=Royal

  1. Date: 9/11/2010 6:33:00 PM
    SOUNDS LIKE A DREAMY NIGHT! oh by the way...I worked on lion's den see if it makes sense.

  1. Date: 9/9/2010 6:13:00 AM
    Don't you just love being "under the influence"? Thanks for writing and sharing, Hai Au Chu.

  1. Date: 9/8/2010 12:30:00 AM
    Enjoyed your take on "stupor" with this write of yours-- made me smile--clever play on moonshine and intoxicate over here as well... just a typo for "bravado"-- hope this helps-- I sure am enjoying reading your poems :) -- nikko :)

  1. Date: 3/16/2010 10:29:00 AM
    Yes... All I can write.

  1. Date: 3/3/2010 3:42:00 PM
    How romantic! Great use of imagery too, Hai. Enjoyed reading your poem. Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 3/2/2010 12:27:00 PM
    VEry interesting and enjoyable little free verse poem, (Hai, is it?) I hope to see more from you! andrea

  1. Date: 3/2/2010 4:16:00 AM
    Loved it!

  1. Date: 2/28/2010 6:15:00 PM
    Sounds like moon shine isn't the only drug the subject is on. For me the last line hints at a memory of someone else that led to the intoxication in the first place. I like the tone and delivery. I'll have to imagine what his confession may be. thanks for sharing. Yoni

  1. Date: 2/27/2010 7:09:00 PM
    I like the careless bravado and the intoxication by another. Good imagery of someone infatuated perhaps. well written Hai . thank you for reading and commenting on my 'Chill out" I am pleased it made you smile, can't take life to seriously all the time :) cheers Margaret

  1. Date: 2/26/2010 5:09:00 AM
    Lovely - made me smile - thanks