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stupor

clouded by
careless bravado
i say 
less

goodnight.

clouds have gone 
and I am
in the spotlight
of moon shine

loose lips
break the silence
but no one hears
the confession 
of a fool
intoxicated
under 
the influence
of you

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  1. Date: 4/1/2011 9:07:00 AM

    Breathless and breathtaking expression of one in luv.. Hai.. it is a joy to read your lines and absorb their meaning luv.. hope u enjoy a happy weekend with luv..

  1. Date: 9/20/2010 11:27:00 AM

    Nice, "intoxicated" love the last stanza, enjoyed your write, =(^.^)=Royal

  1. Date: 9/11/2010 6:33:00 PM

    SOUNDS LIKE A DREAMY NIGHT! oh by the way...I worked on lion's den see if it makes sense.

  1. Date: 9/9/2010 6:13:00 AM

    Don't you just love being "under the influence"? Thanks for writing and sharing, Hai Au Chu.

  1. Date: 9/8/2010 12:30:00 AM

    Enjoyed your take on "stupor" with this write of yours-- made me smile--clever play on moonshine and intoxicate over here as well... just a typo for "bravado"-- hope this helps-- I sure am enjoying reading your poems :) -- nikko :)

  1. Date: 3/16/2010 10:29:00 AM

    Yes... All I can write.

  1. Date: 3/3/2010 3:42:00 PM

    How romantic! Great use of imagery too, Hai. Enjoyed reading your poem. Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 3/2/2010 12:27:00 PM

    VEry interesting and enjoyable little free verse poem, (Hai, is it?) I hope to see more from you! andrea

  1. Date: 3/2/2010 4:16:00 AM

    Loved it!

  1. Date: 2/28/2010 6:15:00 PM

    Sounds like moon shine isn't the only drug the subject is on. For me the last line hints at a memory of someone else that led to the intoxication in the first place. I like the tone and delivery. I'll have to imagine what his confession may be. thanks for sharing. Yoni

  1. Date: 2/27/2010 7:09:00 PM

    I like the careless bravado and the intoxication by another. Good imagery of someone infatuated perhaps. well written Hai . thank you for reading and commenting on my 'Chill out" I am pleased it made you smile, can't take life to seriously all the time :) cheers Margaret

  1. Date: 2/26/2010 5:09:00 AM

    Lovely - made me smile - thanks