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Cinder Girl

An ember sparked will softly glow,
and fed by fuel, will grow and grow.
I once was cinder, sparked by you,
first timid. . . till the flames then grew.

And so our start was touch of dawn,
with amber hue, for I was drawn
to eyes so welcoming and warm
I never guessed you’d do me harm.

Like morning glory, love in June
the rapture of mid-afternoon,
romance of which the ancients wrote,
our passion had no antidote.

And with the dusk, though scarlet tinged,
our love began to come unhinged,
for clouds arrived, which filled your eyes,
extinguishing bright twilight skies.

With cold of night came shadows’ pall,
and I could not tear down your wall.
By midnight’s hour, the fire was dead.
Mere ashes smoldered in its stead.

You left, and should you reappear,
I’ve vowed to shun you.  Now I fear
the very thing for which I yearn -
one touch. . . and then again - to burn.

For John Heck's contest: Love - It Heals & It Hurts

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  1. Date: 3/15/2014 5:49:00 PM

    Still a beautiful poem. Soup.

  1. Date: 2/22/2014 5:37:00 PM

    Nice and lovely piece, Andrea.This is a master piece.Congrats .!

  1. Date: 1/16/2014 1:42:00 PM

    I like poems with perfect metrical form, and if possible, appropriate rhyme. That's why this fine poem by Andrea Dietrich satisfies me. I am happy to know that it satisfied many others too. Form is important in poetry, very important. Actually it is the perfection in form and the richness in musical content that passes a poem though time and makes it living and available to coming generations for their sincere enjoyment. My compliments to dear poetess.

  1. Date: 12/14/2013 6:33:00 PM

    "Cinder Girl" ...I love that Wonderful poetry

  1. Date: 12/4/2013 11:52:00 PM

    I've read this and commented before (I think I commented anyway) but I wanted to tell you again how amazing I think this poem is... and I am putting it back in my favorites. You're an awesome writer.

  1. Date: 11/25/2013 4:05:00 AM

    There is a way you curve your words that makes you distinct.. I treasure and envy your skill

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 11:39:00 AM

    Exclelent!! ?an I try to sing this verse?

  1. Date: 9/9/2013 1:20:00 PM

    Hi to you Andrea..' I came across the 100 best poems list and saw this made no1..' Great images and discriptive content in this; I believe i have commented on this before; it well deserves its spot..!

    Dietrich Avatar Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/9/2013 2:39:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thanks so much, Joe.
  1. Date: 9/1/2013 5:51:00 PM

    Excellent words! Love the message...

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 4:23:00 AM

    This is one i wish I had written. So very excellent.

  1. Date: 8/5/2013 6:49:00 AM

    This is really good Andrea, very deserving of the top spot -Impressive!!! MC

  1. Date: 8/3/2013 1:09:00 PM

    Loved this!

  1. Date: 6/19/2013 8:18:00 AM

    Such compelling imagery of the harsh reality of love lost. The comparison of fire and burning is excellent metaphor :)

  1. Date: 5/27/2013 11:51:00 AM

    Andrea...I understand why this has received the fame it has! Absolutely stunning. Every line in place...every emotion delved into...amazing! To my favs! Soup mail!

  1. Date: 5/19/2013 1:55:00 PM

    This is such a well deserved 1st in the all time top 100.I know I read it before but it didn't really sink in at the time.Different frame of mind at the time.Hope all is well with you.take care

  1. Date: 5/18/2013 4:24:00 AM

    Your poems are all so beautiful - especially this one. I look forward to reading more of your work.

  1. Date: 5/17/2013 12:21:00 AM

    A very readable piece here Andrea..Your talent well showcased in these lines that flow with ease and yet bitter expierience.. I would guess this to have taken a prize.. wishing you well Joe..)

  1. Date: 4/10/2013 5:02:00 PM

    Must be in very many favourites, this one. Love, glowing, flaring, blazing, flickering, then still smouldering. And the writing enhancing the concept. - Red

  1. Date: 3/28/2013 9:37:00 PM

    oooo ahhhh. Crispy!

  1. Date: 2/16/2013 2:49:00 PM

    Wow! Beyond beautiful, Andrea! This is extraordinary work. I've enjoyed reading it ...twice! The imagery is superb, and it flows so easily. Well done! Luv, Annalise

  1. Date: 2/12/2013 9:26:00 AM

    Ok, I see why this was a big winner. Its so elegant and it flows like water. Andrea, I just love the idea of the cinder smoldering like passion needing only a breath to ignite it. And the touch of darkness at the end puts it over the top in my book. It was a pleasure to read and is going to be one of my favs.

    Brezik Avatar Denis Brezik Date: 3/7/2013 11:35:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    r u kiddn me
  1. Date: 2/10/2013 8:35:00 AM

    I am lost for words Andrea!I can just say I love it in any number! Kind regards, Ali

    Brezik Avatar Denis Brezik Date: 3/7/2013 11:37:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    morning glory are u kDiding me this is the grade of poetry club I aM IN OMG
  1. Date: 2/2/2013 11:51:00 AM

    What a wonderful poem, Andrea! No wonder #1!!! Terry (makes your kind words even sweeter)

  1. Date: 1/26/2013 5:38:00 AM

    Love is such a spolier! It makes people write such lovely poems. This is wow!!

  1. Date: 1/2/2013 3:26:00 PM

    Great poetry moves me and this is as good as it gets. What a story and your impeccable rhythm and meter blends into perfection. Love, Lizzie

  1. Date: 12/27/2012 5:06:00 PM

    Simply amazing! Great, fantastic job! Thank you! God bless you! :)

  1. Date: 12/17/2012 4:25:00 PM

    nice poem! love it! :) -linda

  1. Date: 12/13/2012 11:00:00 AM

    I am not surprised this is the number one poem on PS, since it is FLAWLESS!!! Once again, your poetry reminds me of Tennyson. You. Are. Awesome. FAVED.

  1. Date: 12/11/2012 3:22:00 AM


  1. Date: 11/29/2012 1:44:00 AM

    this made my night. very very nice.