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Sweet Deathly Rose

Oh, mild flower I chanced to meet,
A ruby red, yet so discreet.
She'd never seen a hue my blue.
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

Her fragrance wafted on the breeze,
And all were drawn to her with ease.
I put down roots near her and grew.
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

Though in her garden all seems well,
there still are things she hates to tell.
Her thorns, a shield, conceal what's true.
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

Beneath her thorns, resentment grows.
Disturb her and her petals close!
I learned too well what could ensue. . . 
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

A casual remark was said.
Her ruby rose turned scarlet red. . .
I guiltless pled. Did I misdo?
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

A fury she had kept so deep
had been unleashed; it made me weep.
Retaliation cut me through.
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.

A leaf of peace she offered me:
Be friends, but only partially.
But I refused and shall eschew
Sweet deathly rose that I once knew.


For Carol Brown's "LET DOWN Poetry Contest"


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  1. Date: 12/2/2011 9:39:00 AM

    wow andrea, I LOVE this! unusual for me as I'm not always keen on forms that use repetition, but this is so well written, bittersweet and deep, congrats!

  1. Date: 12/1/2011 8:25:00 PM

    Excellent write......congrats on your win!

  1. Date: 12/1/2011 6:34:00 PM

    A beautifully written Kyrielle Andrea. Congratulations on your worthy first place. Agape, Moses

  1. Date: 12/1/2011 6:07:00 PM

    Very, very well-written! Congratulations in the contest.

  1. Date: 12/1/2011 5:08:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win :)

  1. Date: 12/1/2011 12:56:00 PM

    Awesome ,Andrea.Congratulations on your win...

  1. Date: 12/1/2011 8:58:00 AM

    Lots of meaning here. Congratulations Andrea. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 12/1/2011 8:40:00 AM

    Just beautiful Andrea. I love it. Congrats on your win. Well deserved.

  1. Date: 12/1/2011 7:03:00 AM

    It is fantastic, Andrea.Congratulations on your win!

  1. Date: 12/1/2011 6:36:00 AM

    Congratulations on your placement in my contest Andrea. You all left a piece of yourselves on this contest page. It was so very hard to judge. I am asking you all to read and comment on all the winners here. You will go away seeing into the hearts of all the winners. This was a very emotional contest for me. Thank you all for supporting this contest. Love and blessing to you all, Carol

  1. Date: 6/12/2011 10:19:00 AM

    this was a lovely piece of poetry, give it a 7. thank you for commenting on I wish I was a Cloud.

  1. Date: 6/12/2011 5:31:00 AM

    Wow, I love this, Andrea. Thanks for introducing me to yet another form that I'll have to try! And thanks for all your kind comments : )

  1. Date: 1/13/2011 10:48:00 AM

    Another gem of a poem!Enjoyed-kashinath

  1. Date: 3/7/2010 11:46:00 PM

    This deathly rose sounds beautiful(: you wrote this well. i think i might favorite. -Always&Forever Lynette

  1. Date: 2/27/2010 4:10:00 PM

    Beautiful imagery, Andrea, and an effective personification of the rose's characteristics, overlaying what suggests to be a very complex story of human interaction. Congratulations on your well-deserved acknowledgment in the Betrayal contest.

  1. Date: 2/26/2010 7:07:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Starflixer's Betrayal contest Andrea. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 2/25/2010 12:31:00 PM

    Hey Andrea, congratulations on your win in Adelana's "Betrayal" Contest. There are so many "sweet deadly roses"..trust me. Peace, love, Audrey

  1. Date: 2/25/2010 12:10:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win, Andrea! You already know how moved I was by this beautiful poem. Enjoy your success. Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 2/25/2010 12:05:00 PM

    Congrats on your winning poem and placing 4th in the Betrayal contest.. YEAH!! big cheers... I placed 5th with Lover's Lance.. a wonderful win Andrea for a most elegant write so emotional on the subject.. enjoy this sweet victory..luv.. your friend ...Linda-Marie (u were so right about that number in yahoo mail).. ta dah!!

  1. Date: 1/27/2010 8:32:00 PM

    WOW! this is definitely going to my faves, Andrea! Been out of touch for a week I have some catching up to do with your poems--this is amazing! I agree with all the others, this is a winner if I saw one--I was hooked by it and it haunting and tragic, but so beautifully written, I reread it like 3 times in a row...beautiful!

  1. Date: 1/27/2010 12:10:00 PM

    COMPLETLEY BEAUTIFUL!!! I am in love with this poem!! Great, Great write =D - Echo

  1. Date: 1/26/2010 5:18:00 PM

    Dear Andrea, This POEM is so Beautiful ALWAYS YOUR Liege...HG - SOUP MAIL CALL

  1. Date: 1/26/2010 4:08:00 PM

    Dear Andrea, I truely LOVE this POEM I put it in my Favorite POEMS and POET ALWAYS YOUR Liege...HG -- SOUP MAIL CALL

  1. Date: 1/25/2010 11:10:00 PM

    beautifully composed. A sure winner! The rhyme was perfectly done. P.s. I posted another of my oldies.

  1. Date: 1/25/2010 9:18:00 AM

    Andrea, It's a winner!It's a winner for sure! Smiles, Dane Ann

  1. Date: 1/25/2010 6:44:00 AM

    COMPLETLY AWESOME! you blew me away with this one. Love, lainie

  1. Date: 1/24/2010 9:17:00 AM

    Andrea, this a gem of a poem > i wish you all the best in Olusequn's contest, but somehow i don't think you will need it. Its a winner in my eyes >> James

  1. Date: 1/23/2010 6:31:00 PM

    Andrea, This poem is such an incredible work of art; I don't know where to begin telling you how much this poem moved me. It shows your range as a poet and what a master poet you have become. Your work inspires me to reach for the stars! I love every line in this beautifully crafted poem. Best of luck in the contest as this poem is sure to garner honors. Blessings, Connie

  1. Date: 1/23/2010 5:02:00 PM

    Wow. Talk about betrayal. A powerful write Andrea. Best Wishes Always, Bill

  1. Date: 1/23/2010 4:35:00 PM

    I'm glad that I had the chance to read this write Andrea,..it really draws the reader in,...great write ! james

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