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One Sided Love Affair - Choka in 5-7-7

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One Sided Love Affair - Choka in 5-7-7

.                                           What a fool I am
                                    Clinging to a broken dream
                                     That can never be the same

                                           Coming all this way
                                Thinking I could change your mind
                                   Oh! so true that love is blind

                                            Sitting here alone
                                      Starring at an empty chair
                                  That throws the truth in my face

                                         It hurts! To love you
                                 So I’ll board the morning train
                                     And forget you once again.


                                      Written:  October 9th, 2009
                             For:   Brian Strand’s Imagine Contest
                     Inspired by: Edward Hopper’s Painting: ‘AUTOMAT’.
                      1st Place 

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  1. Date: 11/5/2009 9:41:00 PM

    Congratulations on winning first place in Brian's contest!! Peace and love, Audrey

  1. Date: 10/23/2009 5:34:00 AM

    Congratulations, Laine, on placing in Brian’s Imagine contest with this wonderful choka. The painting was inspiring. Your creativity excels. Smiles, Dane Ann

  1. Date: 10/22/2009 1:23:00 PM

    Congratulations, Elaine. Well done. Thank you for your comments. Love, Iolanda

  1. Date: 10/19/2009 12:19:00 PM

    I totally get how this relates to the painting and your title brings all this together! Well done! Congratulations on your first place win!

  1. Date: 10/19/2009 8:03:00 AM

    Just to say Elaine I airmailed your prize this morning.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments and kind words today.

  1. Date: 10/19/2009 7:43:00 AM

    HA! : ) What did I tell you? Congratulations, Elaine!!! Enjoy the recognition....great piece. Ruben.

  1. Date: 10/18/2009 7:04:00 PM

    Congrats on your poetry winning contest entry. Your poem is quite touching and very moving..

  1. Date: 10/18/2009 2:39:00 PM

    I picked this painting did a supurb job and deserved the win. Love, BG

  1. Date: 10/18/2009 11:11:00 AM

    Congratulations on your 1st place WIN with this wonderful piece, Lainie! Love, Robin

  1. Date: 10/18/2009 10:46:00 AM

    Well done, great poem!! congrats on the big win!!

  1. Date: 10/18/2009 8:47:00 AM

    You were able to tell a whole story, sad tale in this wonderful imginative poem! Congratulations on this winning entry, Elaine. Well deserved! ~ Love, Carrie

  1. Date: 10/18/2009 6:04:00 AM

    Congratulations on your first place win in Brian's Imagine Contest Lainie. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/18/2009 1:15:00 AM

    Congratulations on your FIRST place win, Lainie! Hugs, Donna

  1. Date: 10/18/2009 1:09:00 AM

    Congrats on your success in my contest Elaine.Rgds Brian.My latest contest'Poet Laureate' is now open.I will forward you prize in the coming week.

  1. Date: 10/17/2009 1:41:00 PM

    Wonderful Choka, Elaine! Best of luck in the contest.

  1. Date: 10/16/2009 10:02:00 AM

    i feel ya. careing abotu someone who has someone else never works, even if they care about you too, if they arent willing to have you and not the other person....well okay technically im the other person and not the gf....anyways if the person you care about cant leave their gf/bf for you then its gonna lead to nothing but people getting hurt....this sucks...well semi talking about my situation lol your poem is awesome anyways keep it up -raiin

  1. Date: 10/15/2009 7:47:00 AM

    Thank you for your encouragement today Elaine.Also to say,thank you for your mail, I airmailed my chapbook to you this morning.Rgds Brian

  1. Date: 10/14/2009 10:25:00 PM

    Wow! Awesome write here, Elaine! And, so far, it's the winner! Excellent "description" of the painting! Ruben.

  1. Date: 10/13/2009 7:40:00 AM

    I love this form. It hits the area between haiku and tanka. By the way, as usual, I love your writing. Love, daver

  1. Date: 10/12/2009 6:13:00 PM

    Beautiful Choka Elaine. Good luck in the contest. Sincerely, Love, moses

  1. Date: 10/12/2009 6:53:00 AM

    Good luck in Brian's contest. I love the presentation of the idea. It is amazing how many different thoughts came from the same pictures. Thanks for the comments on my work. Keep writing. Sara

  1. Date: 10/11/2009 7:03:00 PM

    nicely penned, Ilike thiside you could go alot of ways.

  1. Date: 10/11/2009 3:57:00 PM

    This is such a beautifully written Choka, Lainie. I love your view on this lovely and intriquing painting! Good luck in Brians' contest! Love, Robin

  1. Date: 10/11/2009 2:24:00 PM

    I sure does hurt! I can relate to this! Preach on, sister. Write on, sister.

  1. Date: 10/10/2009 10:01:00 PM

    We do tend to cling to broken dreams, Lainie. Then suddenly there's a wakeup call that makes us realize hope is pointless. Your interpretation of this painting is superb! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 10/10/2009 12:46:00 AM

    Thank you for supporting my contest Elaine.Rgds Brian

  1. Date: 10/9/2009 8:25:00 PM

    you have been on fire with the contest you have entered. you are on a roll ..... keep them coming!!!!!

  1. Date: 10/9/2009 8:14:00 PM

    Wonderfully written, Lanie! You'll do well with this one, no need for luck! Hugs, Donna

  1. Date: 10/9/2009 1:35:00 PM

    Hard to forget some things. Well put. Have a good weekend. Yours Matthew Anish

  1. Date: 10/9/2009 12:58:00 PM

    Like a dramatic scene from a wonderful movie...the darkness outside, the sadness of the dreary automat,...rejected lover crying over coffee...great job, Elaine!! ~ Good luck in Brian's contest!! ~ love, Carrie