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I AM DOWN!

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I AM DOWN!

I was a young boy when I was told I am dull joy 
I envied my playmates when they show me their toys
I got nothing but a piece of small toy of no hand soldier
I picked it in the mud of our house under
I kept it as a promised that I must submit
I am a poor to bet my playmates were rich 
I am determined to keep that I am indeed a bit
I am but a chip of delight!

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  1. Date: 9/7/2009 3:13:00 AM

    Poverty is only external. Internally you are rich with words which you have expressed. Sara

  1. Date: 9/4/2009 10:43:00 AM

    Thanks for bringing your talent to PoetrySoup, Neldy. Hope to read lots more from you!

  1. Date: 8/31/2009 3:17:00 PM

    chip of delight with a good talent in poetry..awesome--charma

  1. Date: 8/22/2009 11:31:00 PM

    enjoyed this poetry... so origianl, i could see the playmates and the mud.. enjoy your night:)

  1. Date: 8/22/2009 10:55:00 AM

    A chip off the old block hey, Neldy ... LOL ... cute write here.

  1. Date: 8/17/2009 8:31:00 PM

    But you are millonaire in talent, Joldy!! Great-great piece. Ruben.