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Things I Remember About You

Shared
Seasons
And the years
Dawn, day, dusk, night
And sharing a dinner by candlelight

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Months
Seasons
And the years
Dawn, day, dusk, night
And sharing a dinner by candlelight

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  1. Date: 7/10/2009 9:35:00 AM

    I'm in a quandry, I like the word Shared.being in line one...BUT I agree..in a verse with so few words...I would not use the word share twice......YET..I think? the verse is predominantly about....Sharing life with a special someone...not about...Month. Light & Love

  1. Date: 7/8/2009 12:53:00 PM

    The little pleasures that make a lifetime, wonderfully done! ~Trudy~

  1. Date: 7/8/2009 10:58:00 AM

    Wonderful memories Jim. I don't know this form of poetry but I do know I loved the poem. Love, Carol