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Internally Torn

I can’t eat nor sleep,
She took what matters the most;
Reflection of me.

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  1. Date: 5/4/2009 2:51:00 PM

    Nice! I really like this. It's awesome to see three lines be powerful.

  1. Date: 4/30/2009 1:17:00 PM

    Much said in just three lines, leaving the reader with something to ponder. Interesting end to this poem. Best wishes with your writing. Karen

  1. Date: 4/27/2009 10:42:00 PM

    Would the "reflection" by a child? You say a lot here in just three lines. When a love leaves our life, we feel the disruption in ordinary activities like eating or sleeping, but eventually (as Raul said) the appetite returns. Excellent Senryu, Tyler! Best wishes, Carolyn

  1. Date: 4/27/2009 10:02:00 PM

    I have felt similar feelings and in time I regained my hunger. I love the last line, the reference is strong, perhaps a seed...Raul