Submit a Poem
Get Your Premium Membership
spacer
Pinterest button
Comments Inbox

 
About This Poem

Storm Climax

.

My closed eyes can see
Lines and rows of running rain
A rainbow of sounds

On roof, leaves, and ground
Song of rain falls everywhere
A restful white noise

Unseen lightning brings
A roar to mate land in heat
Primal shiver-sin

Reverberant sound
Sky has been ripped and shakes
Waves of noise collide

Furious moans fade 
Thunder’s ecstasy’s over
An exhaust lover

Tomorrow morning
Bliss of children will splash sky
Puddles of heaven




.

Please Login to post a comment
Next>|Last
 
  1. Date: 4/26/2012 2:49:00 PM

    wow. I don't know if I saw this amazing one before, but it's GREAT. soupmail

  1. Date: 3/27/2010 1:04:00 AM

    Thank you for supporting my contest Ruben.Rgds Brian

  1. Date: 2/15/2010 10:27:00 AM

    Hey Ruben! I'm a little late, but please accept my congratulations on your exciting win in Mac's "Anything Goes Contest" This is excellent..the wonderful imagery makes a compelling and enjoyable read! Peace, Audrey

  1. Date: 2/12/2010 12:14:00 PM

    Congratulations on your well deserved win in Mac's contest Ruben. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 2/12/2010 7:30:00 AM

    Ruben, it's like an impressionist's painting of rain. Love your images. congrats! andrea

  1. Date: 2/11/2010 6:22:00 PM

    Congrats Ruben on your winning poem in Mac's contest.. an amazing write.. a wonderful win .. for an amazing guy and talented poet.. luv.. Linda-Marie...

  1. Date: 2/11/2010 6:06:00 PM

    Oh I love the way the poem ends with a bright tomorrow! Well done, my friend!!! Congratulations once again!!!! :)

  1. Date: 7/12/2009 10:49:00 PM

    beautiful storms of mind in rapture .. Jayne x

  1. Date: 7/8/2009 8:18:00 PM

    Thanks ruben for comment on my poetry, hope you've caught your breath, I've never thought of a storm in this way, great capture. of rapture, my man, with God's plan, let love stand, in the land, Godly love to you, jm

  1. Date: 6/20/2009 12:41:00 AM

    I love this as well as many of your others that I have read. Im sure I will enjoy many many more in the future. I would also like to thank you for your very kind words. I have been writing now for about well, A whole week or so, Again, I thank you for being kind, Sincerely, Jdawn

  1. Date: 6/10/2009 1:28:00 PM

    mail

  1. Date: 6/5/2009 1:06:00 PM

    Muchas gracias por todos los comentarios hermano, me dan mucho aliento en verdad =D Jojojo tu escribes poderoso tambien, y vamos, si tantas ganas sientes, ¿por qué dejar la energía acomule moho?=D Jojojojo nuestro idioma es genial, cualquier cosa que escribamos con él es bella, un ruta de obstáculos en un parque para niños, resbaladillas y laberintos churriguerescos jojojojo excelente poema =D=D=D gracias por la experiencia =D

  1. Date: 5/20/2009 12:49:00 PM

    Ruben - Congratulations on placing in Raul’s, “The Sounds of Nature Contest” God Bless, MJ

  1. Date: 5/17/2009 2:54:00 PM

    Ruben, concrats on your placement in Raul's contest.

  1. Date: 5/15/2009 2:54:00 PM

    Exhilarating write Ruben! Congratulations on your win!-AA

  1. Date: 5/15/2009 11:07:00 AM

    I'm Jumping...: )

  1. Date: 5/15/2009 10:01:00 AM

    Lovely writing Ruben. The last verse is my favorite. Congrats on your win

  1. Date: 5/15/2009 8:54:00 AM

    Wow, this is so powerful and the words are so smoothe. I love it! Great writing. Congratulations on the Honorable Mention in Raul's contest. Smiles from Lolita

  1. Date: 5/15/2009 8:28:00 AM

    Congrats on your success in Raul's contest Ruben Rgds Brian

  1. Date: 5/15/2009 6:12:00 AM

    Loved this uplifting and happy poem of nature and so well deserving being honored in Raul's contest! ~ Congratulations!!~ love, Carrie

  1. Date: 5/15/2009 5:39:00 AM

    Congratulations Ruben on your most awesome win in Raul's contest! Well done! Love, Shar

  1. Date: 5/15/2009 2:15:00 AM

    Ruben, congrats for placing in my contest...Raul

  1. Date: 5/8/2009 9:07:00 AM

    Also check out my new poem, What The Elders Might say.....

  1. Date: 5/8/2009 9:06:00 AM

    I believe there are so many tiltles and rules to poetry that folks are making everything so tecnical about it. write and just have fun. enjoyed this piece and thank you for your warm comments.

  1. Date: 5/6/2009 7:35:00 PM

    Wow Ruben, think I missed this the week or so I was off the soup. Extraordinary beauty in each verse. Love storms. Awesome writing! Love, Shar

  1. Date: 5/5/2009 9:24:00 PM

    I like how you think beyond the box =)

  1. Date: 5/2/2009 6:52:00 AM

    This is outstanding Ruben... :) Great use of words... Storm lovers yes!

  1. Date: 5/1/2009 2:16:00 PM

    Creative use of sound and visual imagery for a interesting poem. I really like the last line. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and for your kind comments. Have a good weekend! Karen

  1. Date: 4/30/2009 11:24:00 PM

    I read all your poems... every...single... one... of them. I only have one word. Wow. I can't even type it out! Somehow... I don't know why, but, your poems remind me of Charlotte Bronte. So sad, tortured, yet... a light. Just.... spectacular. No, not even that works...wow.

  1. Date: 4/30/2009 2:07:00 PM

    Soup mail for Ruben!

Next>|Last